A common lesson in every aerial combat drama, not to leave thy wingman. Hopefully the squadron will be a soberer lot going forward...
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grayghost said:Very well done.
LaCalle's speech was very poetic and poignant, as was his closing statement.
It will be interesting to see what affect Eddie's loss will have on Ian.
And I take it that the young German pilot Wilhelm will become a recurring antagonist for Ian.
bafflegab said:Great update!
It's unfortunate that the lessons learned had to come at such a high price, however, I think that those who remain will likely be far more vigilant about listening to the instructions which they receive from LaCalle in the future.
coz1 said:Great new post. That was some exciting flying. Sad to lose a fallen comrade but part of the battle.
I enjoyed the touch about them running outside when they heard a plane engine. Nicely done.
El Pip said:An excellent post. For some reason LaCalle's closing speech had me thinking of a bastardised version of, of all things, a Vinnie Jones quote;
Quote:
Originally Posted by Vincent Jones
If Ian's premature demise has, in some way, enlightened the rest of you as to the grim finish below the glossy veneer of a pilots life, and inspired you to improve your flying, then his death carries with it an inherent nobility. And a supreme glory. We should all be so fortunate. You can say 'Poor Ian." I say: "Poor us.."
Now whether that says more about the standard of writing, the hitherto unsuspected philosophical depths of Vinny Jones or my own free-wheeling brain is a different question altogether.....
canonized said:A sobering chapter to be sure . - Takes a swig of his flasked scotch -
Like I said before , I think this AAR as far as I know is unique in the details and beauty of the aerial combat . I rewatched Top Gun the other day too just out of coincidence XD . Well done , ole boy ! Now ... about that business with a girl XD .
rcduggan said:very well written update, and good to see this is back.
Atlantic Friend said:Oh, great and sobering speech indeed from LaCalle.
Mettermrck said:A common lesson in every aerial combat drama, not to leave thy wingman. Hopefully the squadron will be a soberer lot going forward...
Lord Durham said:Hmmm. Plane crashes. Brings back memories...
Very nice work, T_E. You are weaving a good, compelling story with an interesting, well-crafted character in Ian. The flying sequences are especially sweet. I feel like I'm riding in the cockpit. Keep up the good work. I'll be reading.
Bafflegab said:Unfortunate that you are gone... Looking forward to an update when you are bach and have time.
canonized said:I'm so glad you've started writing again ! As usual your dialogue and your pre-noir heaviness makes itself as tangible as an aromatic coffee shop . It starts out as subtle as a whistle then explodes in the building next to you!
El Pip said:Ahh Communist intrigues, almost as good as Communist logic;
"We tortured him twice and he said the same thing, it must be true!"
Still, fun times ahead for Ian's squadron I have no doubt; nothing like a fevered hunt for a possibly non-existent spy to raise morale.![]()
Bafflegab said:"The only illusion is to believe that time is not important. When I first came here, I was also under that illusion. Most of us were – in fact, the entire apparatus up to the top. Today we have realized we must now work quickly to..."
"The bad news: I came back from my overseas business trip to be tossed into the deep end of another priority project. Here's hoping this one won't involve prodigious amounts of overtime!"
An example of how sometimes our own lives are mimicked in the stories we tell...
Great update. I am looking forward to seeing the reactions of our revolutionaries to the results of Alain's mole hunt. I wonder how they will understand if one of their own is "summarily dismissed" from their midst if there is only circumstantial or trivial evidence to support Alain's future actions. Will some of these ideologues be disabused of their sense of purity associated with the system in which they believe?
coz1 said:Great to see another update. I am wondering where this spy business intersects with our main character. I hope not directly.
El Pip said:Mwuhahahaha! I kept saying Eddie would make it, my fine history of predicting plot points continues!
Good update, and well done on not making the dream sequence too cheesy (when I read the waking up part I had a horrible feeling you might have done a 'Dallas' [and not in a Debbie sense]and have Ian wake up to find Eddie hadn't crashed at all
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Ahh double bracketage, now that's the true sign of a good post.![]()
coz1 said:Tricksy, you are, throwing a dream sequence in there. But it worked. And too bad he couldn't find the chance to attack when he awoke, but all in good time. I have a feeling he'll have plenty of chances for daring-do as the story goes along.
Bafflegab said:It could just be that Chang has just been told about where they could find Eddy's LASTing impression...
BTW, very strong update. With dreams like that, Ian is going to have one hell of a complex each time he goes up...
canonized said:I KNEW IT ! But excellently played nonetheless XD . Very well done !
canonized said:I'm going to guess she's American . ... I have no reason why haha
EDIT: NO NO !! I HAVE IT ! she has to be German !! A german female pilot !