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Innocence Lost

This will be a story driven AAR from small town American perspective.
Normal Difficulty
Normal Agression

It will tell the tale of an American fammily over the course of a decade, The children will grow up and go off to war... But I am getting ahead of myself.


Warning:
If you are looking for intimate combat details you will not be getting many before you have the game yourself, as it wil be a while before the USA gets into battle.

I will put up the Prelude to the AAR in a few minutes.
 
How many AAR's have begun today? Three? Methinks this is in response to the delayed shipping date.:D Good luck, Castellon, and to all a good week and a half.:)
 
Prelude

INNOCENCE LOST

Prelude

The snow was lightly falling on the gently rolling hills and fields of the Smith family farm. The farm itself was a modest spread in upper state New York. It was New Years day 1936.
The Smiths were the typical American family, respected and liked by their neighbours, they attended church faithfully every Sunday, but were not obnoxiously pious. Their world view was a small one, The farm, Church on Sunday and a trip to town for supplies on Saturdays. Anything outside that cocoon was "out there".

The Patriarch of the Family, Grampa John, was ensconced in his favourite chair and blowing smoke rings up towards the ceiling while pulling his scruffy robe tighter about him to ward off the slight chill. A gruff old coot who was best known for having won a medal for loosing a leg in the great war.

He claimed it was earned saving a famous General's life, but no one believed that, least of all Gramma Smith his wife, who sat accross the room effecting repairs to a pair of his red britches. She thought he probably had an open rat bite on his leg and fell into a latrine ditch. The relative peace of this scene was suddenly interrupted, by the front door slamming shut, and the pounding of running feet down the hall to the sitting room.

A blur flashed around the corner and suddenly Grampa John had a wiggling 10 year old boy in his lap. Grampa, Grampa, Dad says I can go into town with him on Saturday. "Easy Johnny, easy" Grampa John managed to stammer out.

"Where is everyone else, Johnny" Gramma Smith asked. "Well, Charlie is helping Dad with fixing the tractor and Derek is bringing in the Cows. Is dinner almost ready". "Yes dear, your Mom and Carolyn are just putting the final touches on the turkey. I noticed you did not mention little Lisa, you know you are supposed to be keeping an eye on her." The glare she directed at Johnny while speaking left do doubt he had better have the right answer. Unfortunately for Johnny he was distracted watching Grampa John's smoke rings and completely missed the look. "Ah Gramma, She is off playing with her stupid dolls somewhere."

Placing her sewing carefully in her lap Gramma Smith Snapped her fingers and Shook them pointing at Young Johnny. "You young sir will gather yourself up right now and find your little sister and you better pray she is okay! or there will be no trip to town for you!"

Johnny leaped from his perch on Grampa John's knee, started to dash out of the room but was frozen with a "Wait!" shout from Gramma Smith. "Find her and gather your brothers as well, then let your father know it is time to clean up for dinner." "Yes mame" Johnny replied quickly with a bob of his head, all the while thinking that if that little brat of a sister had ruined his trip to town he was going to kill her.
 
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Nice start Castellon :)


Originally posted by Patric
Partially... There are two reasons and one is the delay. The other reason is that ... Never mind, you'll see in due time :)


Patric

When is due time? couldn't it be now? :D

alwayse teasing, like in you sig...
 
oooo good guess Red...i would be happy with that.
 
Originally posted by Patric
Partially... There are two reasons and one is the delay. The other reason is that ... Never mind, you'll see in due time :)


Patric

The NDA has been Lifted! (right?)
 
Man i wish i woulda had a good guess..
 
Yes!

Then we finaly can get some AAR with screenies!

Thanks P!
 
Originally posted by Patric
Yes, partially!


:) P

Hurray

May I guess that the betas can speak of the current game, but not about future patches?

btw great job Castellon
 
Look at the time between the post: 3 min! :cool:

Edit: Between Patric's and my post.
 
Patric is still hanging around the forums on a weekend? Wow...you would think that he has done all he could and would be taking a few days off..unless he is hanging around the house with all those swedish swimsuit models (that we know every male swede receives on his 18th birthday)..!!!
 
Sorry to butt in on the undoubtedly riveting NDA conversation but I thought I'd put in a "good work" pat on the back to Castellon for the AAR he's started (you might have noticed it hiding up there).

I like the scene you're setting and the attention to characterization you're using...I've got a good feel for the people involved already.

I'd suggest (since you asked) that in sections where multiple people are speaking, try separating it so each speaker his his/her own line. Example:
"Where is everyone else, Johnny?" Gramma Smith asked.

"Well, Charlie is helping Dad with fixing the tractor and Derek is bringing in the Cows. Is dinner almost ready?"

"Yes dear, your Mom and Carolyn are just putting the final touches on the turkey. I noticed you did not mention little Lisa, you know you are supposed to be keeping an eye on her." The glare she directed at Johnny while speaking left do doubt he had better have the right answer.

Unfortunately for Johnny he was distracted watching Grampa John's smoke rings and completely missed the look. "Ah Gramma, She is off playing with her stupid dolls somewhere."
You'll note that it's slightly easier to tell who's speaking that way - not that your original was hard to read, but in future instalments with longer dialogue sections it would become a problem. I also added in a couple missing punctuation marks (question marks).

Great start, though, and I'll be sure to keep reading. :)