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Iron, Incense, and Intrigue: The Ragnedich Saga
A Crusader Kings 3 AAR. Strict canon. Scene-driven. Fully novelized.


Honors & Distinctions
  • Weekly AAR Showcase Winner — 15 July 2025




About this AAR:
This story follows only documented in-game and historical events. All scenes are dramatized but never invented. The style is that of a historical novel, focused on atmosphere and character.

Game Info:
  • 1066 start
  • Starting as House Rurikid, Polotsk

Active Mods:
  • Nameplates
  • Extended Outliner
  • More Interactive Vassals
  • Clear Notifications
  • Brighter Attributes
  • Raised Army CoA
  • Community Flavor Pack
  • Ethnicities & Portraits Expanded (with CFP + EPE Compatibility Patch)
  • Travelers
  • Travel the Distance
  • Multilingual Education
  • Better Battles Updated

Updates:
A new chapter will be posted roughly every two weeks. Feedback and questions are always welcome. Please use spoiler tags for major speculation or future game events.




Table of Contents (to be updated as the saga continues)






  • Vseslav – Prince of Polotsk. Protagonist and head of House Ragnedich. Stoic, ambitious, carries the burdens of rule and legend.
  • Trifon Sheremetev – Marshal, personal champion, and knight. Bold, defiant, the military right hand of Vseslav.
  • Nikita – Master of Hunt and knight. Superstitious, loyal, provides practical and spiritual counsel.
  • Rostislav – Bodyguard and knight. Physically imposing, ever-watchful, maintains order and confidence among the court and druzhina.
  • Posadnik Ruslan – Posadnik (mayor) and knight. Anxious, politically astute, wary of the dangers that accompany fortune.
  • Grand Princess Sofia – Vseslav’s wife. Regal, poised, provides stability and subtle guidance in court and council.
  • Bishop Sviatoslav – Bishop and councilor. Pious, tense, struggles with the moral weight of the court’s actions.
  • Theodosius – Chancellor. Oversees domestic affairs and stability; methodical, focused on ledgers, documents, and internal diplomacy.
  • Yevdokia – Spymaster. Observant, enigmatic, monitors the court’s secrets and ensures security.
  • Koz’ma Kholmsky – Caravan Master. Shrewd merchant newly appointed to oversee markets and logistics.
  • Yosef – Personal physician and knight. Calm, experienced in both medicine and war, sworn to protect the prince’s health.
  • Zelekman – Steward, court chronicler, and knight. Wry, sharp-eyed, responsible for finances and for preserving the saga of House Ragnedich.



"A prince who steals a city’s voice, and dares to make it sing for his own."

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Feedback, questions, and curiosity are welcome. I am happy to share more behind-the-scenes detail.




Next post: Chapter 1 – The Burning of Novgorod
Read on for fire, fear, and the making of a legend.
 
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In the gutted nave of St. Sophia, smoke drifted through broken arches.
An old man, priest’s robes torn and spattered, knelt amid the blackened stones. His fingers moved from icon to ruined icon, lips working in silence, eyes wide and red. He reached for the rope where the bell had hung, found only the frayed end.
“They have taken God’s voice,” he whispered, and the words seemed to vanish into the ash and snow.
Behind him, the city moaned. Far off, a bell sounded—deep, unfamiliar, and impossibly distant.
The priest bowed his head, unsure if the echo was real or a curse.

Night fell, and the name Vseslav passed from mouth to mouth, a secret, a threat, a prayer for vengeance.

Chapter 1: The Burning of Novgorod

The world was black with crows and bright with cold, the last leaves of autumn churned into the mud where Prince Vseslav Briachislavich Rurikid led his battered druzhina away from burning Novgorod. Wind pressed ash and woodsmoke against his face, as if the city itself meant to mark every soul that left. Somewhere behind, roofs crackled and fell, the cathedral’s spire twisted by flame, and the bell that had called a city to prayer now groaned on its side, swaddled in hides.

He listened, and for a moment, it seemed the whole earth mourned: crows arguing in the bare branches, boots sucking at the flooded road, the weary cough of a horse that had pulled too much, too far. The sound carried through the fog, heavy and ordinary, as if the day meant nothing but rain, despite what they had done.

Behind him, the druzhina limped on. Some men looked back, crossing themselves or muttering the old prayers their mothers had taught. Others walked heads low, faces daubed with the soot of battle, their silence thick as tar. A young man clung to a battered shield, dried blood crusted on his knuckles, his eyes searching the ground for something lost. The old ones, veterans of many raids, picked their way through puddles, each carrying a private relic: a sliver of bone, a saint’s icon, a child’s ribbon—tokens of home or fortune. It was enough to see the hope held tight in muddy fists.

The wagons creaked with the weight of loot, wheels sunk deep in the ruts. Icons, dulled by ash, nestled beside chalices whose silver seemed almost shy of the weak sun. The torn gospel, its binding split in the violence, flapped in the wind with a sound like frightened birds. The relics themselves appeared uncertain, their sacredness shadowed by the blood and smoke that carried them here. Sometimes, when the wagon lurched, the treasures slid and shivered together, as if recoiling from the men who claimed them.

Over all this, the prince’s banner drooped from a broken pole, black, gold, and blue, its cloth burned and spotted, a ghost of its former pride. One might have laughed at the sight, if any had breath left for it.

At the front, Trifon Sheremetev rode with a battered helm hanging from his saddle, chainmail smeared and torn. He had the look of a man who welcomed bruises as old friends. His laugh rang sharp and cold as the wind. “Let Novgorod chase us, if they dare!” he shouted, not bothering to check who heard. “If they wanted saints’ gold to stay, they should have held their lines, not begged for mercy!” There was something in his voice, part challenge, part boast, and part a need to smother the trembling in his own hands.

No one answered him, but for a heartbeat, Vseslav caught Rostislav’s crooked smile and Nikita’s quick, wary glance. For all their bravado, they were tired, and they knew it.

Nikita, master of the hunt, kept to the shadow of the largest cart. His beard was stiff with frost, sweat still sour beneath the chill. He watched the bell, its bulk swaddled in hides, every jolt a new groan from the leather straps. Nikita’s hands shook. He whispered prayers, old words and half-remembered lines, his thumb tracing the small icon stitched into his sleeve. “No man profits by stealing God’s voice,” he murmured, eyes flicking from relic to wheel and back again. “That bell called the veche. Now it tolls only for vengeance. May we be forgiven.”

The wagon driver ahead of him hunched lower, as if trying to disappear. The horses snorted, rolling clouds of white breath, wary of the scent of blood. Even the crows seemed to watch the procession, curious, unafraid.

At the rear, Rostislav walked with an easy stride, armor scraped and battered but unbowed. His fists were scarred, knuckles broad, and every time the bell’s clapper thudded within its wrappings, he grinned as if hearing a jest no one else could. “It rings for Polotsk now,” he said, leaning toward a younger comrade who eyed the bell as one might a viper. “A prince who can steal a city’s bell can steal its luck, too. If the saints want it back, let them try their hand.”
It was the kind of thing a rogue might say, but there was an edge of real belief beneath the bluster, a challenge to any fate or saint who cared to answer.

Posadnik Ruslan rode with his shoulders hunched, gold bangles hidden under the thick folds of his sleeves. His eyes darted from the loaded wagons to the woods at the road’s edge. For him, the danger was not in curses but in envy. “This haul will bleed us before it saves us,” he muttered, his voice so low it vanished in the mud. “Every lord from here to Kiev will smell the gold. You parade the spoils, my prince. Don’t be shocked when the wolves gather.”
The word “wolves” hung in the air, and somewhere far off, a crow gave an answering call.

At the column’s center, Prince Vseslav rode silent, his profile chiseled by wind and patience. The ache of victory weighed heavier than the relics. He looked at each man in turn, Trifon’s raw daring, Nikita’s superstition, Rostislav’s humor, Ruslan’s gnawing caution, and saw, in each, a mirror of his own uncertainty.

He glanced back once, watching as the towers of Novgorod faded into mist and smoke, the bell’s memory lingering in the air like a restless shadow. The city was lost, but its soul had been taken. Was it luck, the favor of a restless saint, or some darker force that had let them slip away with St. Sophia’s voice? The question hung between cold breaths and the silent flight of crows.

In the chill air, Vseslav felt the weight of old stories pressing upon him—tales his grandmother had told beneath the flickering hearth, how he was born wrapped in a sacred caul, a sign of fate and power. That fragile membrane had marked him from the start, binding his life to forces beyond the battlefield and throne. He imagined the wind carrying those whispered tales now, the distant calls of bird and beast answering in kind, as if the very earth itself turned its great, inexorable wheel.

The burden of that birth, of stolen voices and broken cities, settled on his shoulders heavier than any cloak. He drew a long, slow breath, tasting cold, mud, and the faint bitterness of fear. When he finally spoke, it was not to command, but to shape the tale that would endure beyond blood and flame.

“We have stolen more than gold today,” he said, his voice low but clear to those nearest. “Let Polotsk remember, when the bell is hung and the tales are told.”

So the battered column pressed on, their wounds and riches hidden beneath battered cloaks. Above them, crows wheeled, their cries scattering into the sky, and the legend of the prince who stole a city’s voice began to gather like storm clouds on the horizon.
 
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This promises to be a bold and ambitious undertaking! :D A grim and foreboding first chapter. :)
Tolkien might have felt the world change in such a moment, the wind, the cries of distant birds, the hush as history’s wheel turned.
Tolkien? Do you have a character named so?
 
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Tolkien? Do you have a character named so?

Haha, no, Tolkien is not a character here! At several points, I leave placeholders like that to remind myself to revisit and write something inspired by my favorite authors. Whether it’s “Cornwell battle scene,” “Martin food porn,” “Bryson comedic descriptions,” or “Tolkien nature reverence,” I plan to refine those lines later.

I thought I’d caught all the placeholders, but thanks for pointing this one out! I’ve now revised the line to better reflect Vseslav’s mystical birth and the atmosphere without implying Tolkien as a character. The original was meant as a placeholder nod to the mood I wanted to evoke. Appreciate the catch!
 
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"The bell’s echo haunts the paths homeward, a song of fortune and doom."

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"Novgorod burns beneath a sky heavy with ash and silence, while its conquerors retreat into the cold dawn."


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In the darkness above the Dvina, a slow fog crept through Polotsk’s winding lanes. Hearth smoke drifted from the rafters and caught the newly gilded spire of St. Sophia, its belfry looming high and empty, awaiting the stolen bell.

All through the night, no one slept easy. In merchant lofts and cramped hovels, folk whispered of vengeance, of saints angered and fortunes turning. Somewhere in the blackness, a dog barked and was silenced, and crows stirred restlessly above the market roof.

Later, deep past midnight, on the ramparts, a lone watchman gazed east. The sound faded, but its omen lingered. In the swirling mist, figures began to emerge—the returning host, battered and silent. A bell tolled. Once, twice, a third time, its voice foreign and rough in the cold air. Mothers pressed children to their sides, priests gripped their beads, and in every corner, the city held its breath. The vityazi had returned to Polotsk.

Chapter 2: The Return to Polotsk

The swollen waters of the Dvina shimmered with a cold light beneath a heavy sky thick with low, iron-gray clouds. The river’s edge, lined with reeds blackened by autumn rains, whispered secrets as Prince Vseslav Briachislavich Rurikid guided his weary druzhina toward the battered gates of Polotsk. Horses stumbled through the muddy banks, their breath rising in thin white clouds that vanished quickly into the damp air. Behind them, the heavy wagons groaned under the weight of gold, relics, and the veche bell, still swathed in thick hides. The sound — thunk, thunk, thunk, thwap — heard innumerable times during the journey was wearing thin with all, even Trifon.

As the procession entered the city proper, the atmosphere shifted to something taut and silent. There were no cheers to welcome the victorious, only a river of wary faces lining the streets. The *smerdy* pressed icons to their lips or crossed themselves in hurried prayer. Women drew their children closer beneath simple, faded *ponevas*, skirts wrapped tightly at the waist. *Platoks*, scarves, embroidered with simple red and black geometric patterns, were drawn close under chins, shielding heads from the chill. Small bast shoes shuffled in the mud while the men’s eyes — dark and wary — tracked the column with quiet suspicion. The price of victory was written plainly upon them: the uneasy knowledge that the raid had been both a triumph and a curse.

As the wagons rumbled through the gate, the treasures were brought forth: silver and gold coins clinked inside chests, sacred relics and icons dulled by ash and mud, with chalices tarnished by heat and fire were now carefully stacked, and at the center of it all rested the veche bell. Expelling a muffled groan as it was labored from the wagon, that seemed to echo the unease settling over Polotsk.

Grand Princess Sofia stood with measured grace near the stone steps of the keep, her mantle heavy against the chill, her gaze steady but shadowed. Her eyes sought Vseslav’s, catching the fatigue and weight he bore. Though regal in bearing, there was a flicker of concern, a silent question about the future that her calm could not fully mask. Beside her, Holy Father Sviatoslav clutched the polished wood of his staff, lips moving in soft prayer. His eyes widened as they fell on the veche bell, the stolen voice of Novgorod now glorifying and darkening the heart of Polotsk. His thoughts were heavy with unease, torn between blessing the victory and mourning the sacrilege.

Near the treasury, Theodosius, head of the chancellery, bent over ledgers and parchment with a furrowed brow. At thirty-one, his frame bore quiet weariness, but his eyes burned with zeal for faith and justice. A righteous zealot, Theodosius balanced his intellectual rigor with a temperate demeanor, though lingering illness marked his body. His sharp mind measured every coin and consequence alike, aware that the city’s future hinged on careful stewardship and unwavering conviction.

In the shadows, Yevdokia, the tongue of Polotsk, moved with silent grace. Only eighteen, her youthful face concealed a dark cunning and ruthless ambition. Sadistic and greedy, she wielded cruelty as a tool, unafraid to command brutal justice or orchestrate merciless schemes. Yet she was patient and elusive, weaving webs of intrigue that tightened slowly and inevitably. Watching the crowd like a hawk, her presence was a shadow that none dared challenge, guarding the prince’s secrets with ruthless devotion.

The bell’s muted toll seemed to hang over the city like a dark cloud, an unspoken promise of power and peril alike. It was under this heavy sky that Vseslav called the council to order.

“Polotsk stands unbowed,” he declared, voice steady despite weariness. “Let Kiev and Novgorod remember whose hand struck and whose bell tolls for the living.” His words stirred the assembly, mingling hope with fear, ambition with the knowledge that peace would be fragile.

The heavy oaken doors of the council hall groaned shut behind the gathered nobles and courtiers, sealing them away from the whispers and restless murmurs of the city beyond. The hall was a vast, timber-framed structure, its walls thick with generations of soot and smoke from the central hearth that roared low beneath the high, shadowed rafters. Heavy wooden beams, hewn with crude but purposeful strokes, stretched overhead, their grain worn smooth by age and countless hands. Animal hides and tapestries, faded but still rich with intricate knotwork and geometric patterns, echoes of Varangian heritage mingled with Slavic artistry hung along the walls, dampening the cold and softening voices.

The floor was packed earth, softened in places by the tread of many feet, while rough-hewn benches circled the fire’s glow, their surfaces worn by generations of princes, warriors, and counselors who had gathered to weigh fate and forge alliances. Flickering shadows danced across the wooden pillars, and the faint scent of resin and pine filled the air, mingling with the tang of burning wood.

The council hall’s shadows thickened as Vseslav entered, the firelight throwing flickers across his face, distorting his features making him appear misshapen and grotesque. His walk was heavy with fatigue, but when he reached the high seat, he stood tall, gripping the chair’s carved arms as if steadying himself. He let his gaze sweep the assembled councilors, measuring each: the loyal, the ambitious, the uncertain. He cleared his throat, voice calm but edged with weariness. “We return with much. Gold, relics, and the bell—treasures won at great cost. Our city watches us now, hoping for strength. They smell fortune, and danger.”

Grand Princess Sofia sat at his right, her posture regal but her eyes alert. She took in every gesture, every whisper exchanged among the council, cataloguing alliances and unspoken threats. When she caught Vseslav’s eye, she offered a faint, encouraging nod, her lips barely parting as if to remind him he did not stand alone.

Bishop Sviatoslav rose next, crossing himself and moving toward the table where relics and icons lay beneath a sooty cloth. He hesitated before the veche bell, his expression grave. His prayer was brief, his voice low. “May God forgive the theft that saved our city. May He grant us wisdom to use these spoils in His service, and humility to remember their cost.” He lingered, fingers trembling as if torn between blessing and accusation. “We must not mistake fortune for favor,” he added, casting a wary look at Vseslav.

Theodosius shuffled his ledgers and coughed softly, drawing the room’s attention. His eyes glinted with practical calculation as he stood to address the council. “Our coffers are swollen, yes—but so are our needs. The soldiers have not been paid, the walls need repair, and the people expect generosity. Every coin spent must earn its keep. I ask plainly—how much will be kept, how much gifted, how much spent for defense?” He shot a look at Sviatoslav, the friction between spiritual and fiscal duty sharp in his tone.

Theodosius’s fingers tapped the edge of his ledger, and his tone sharpened. “One matter presses above the rest, my prince. We have gold for now, but the city’s accounts run untended. There is no steward—no master of coin to keep honest measure. Already I hear complaints of missing dues, of market stalls uncounted, of lords slow to send their owed tribute. Without a collector to set the measure and enforce it, our treasury will bleed quietly into the hands of clever men.”

He looked squarely at Vseslav. “This is a void that must be filled. If Polotsk is to thrive, you must find someone both loyal and shrewd to oversee what the city is owed.”

Yevdokia lingered near a timber pillar at the edge of the hall, her silhouette blending into the flickering gloom. She rarely spoke during these councils; instead, she watched. Her gaze drifted from Theodosius’s ledgers to Sviatoslav’s anxious hands, pausing now and then on Sofia, as if reading the undercurrents in every expression. Once, a servant tried to edge too close to the council table—Yevdokia caught his sleeve with two fingers, offered a quiet, unreadable smile, and sent him on his way without a word. Even when she was silent, the room seemed to remember she was there, and some councilors glanced her way before whispering, weighing what should remain unsaid.

The council’s low voices fell further when Rostislav entered from the courtyard, still clad in battered mail and a half-face helm, sword hanging at his side. He moved with deliberate slowness, taking up a place just behind the prince’s chair. His reputation—earned on campaign and polished in Polotsk’s shadowed corridors—meant that even seasoned nobles let their hands drop from their swords and their words catch in their throats when he was near. He neither spoke nor scowled, but every so often his gaze would linger on a courtier or guest just a moment too long, the silent promise of consequence hanging heavier than steel.

Debate followed, sharp as a knife. Sviatoslav warned against flaunting the bell, suggesting it be ransomed or hidden; Theodosius countered that its presence in St. Sophia would prove Polotsk’s strength to rivals and allies alike. Sofia, gentle but unyielding, steered the conversation from accusation to consensus, reminding all that their unity was their truest shield. Voices rose and fell, old loyalties tested, new tensions sparked.

Vseslav waited for the heat to pass before he spoke again, laying out his plan with clear resolve. “The bell will hang in the cathedral. The gold will pay our soldiers, repair our walls, and draw men of courage and skill to our cause. Already, bold naemniki gather at my hearth, eager for my favor and a place among us. This is not mere plunder, but the rebirth of Polotsk. We cannot prosper by caution alone.” His words hung in the air, heavy and inescapable.

The council fell silent for a heartbeat, the prince’s words hanging in the fire-lit air. Then the room stirred to life. Murmurs turned to overlapping voices, some councilors voicing excitement for the new fortunes, others raising worries about the risks. Sviatoslav’s unease flared into a sharp question about the church’s share. Theodosius tapped his ledger, arguing the treasury could not bear reckless generosity. Even the ever-calm Sofia pressed a quiet point about prudence, warning that such fortune and glory might tempt the opportunistic and cunning Latgalians, the people of the west, to come to Polotsk to take it.

The debate threatened to spill over into a clamor. Rostislav stepped forward from his post, the dull gleam of his helm catching the firelight. He said nothing, but simply rested his gauntleted fist on the table’s edge. The noise ebbed as quickly as it had flared, voices trailing off into respectful quiet. All present knew the prince’s bodyguard enforced not just Vseslav’s will, but the uneasy peace of the court itself. Vseslav spoke, reaserting his authority, "Your knyaz has spoken, Zhrebiy broshen. From down the table, Theodosius leaned closer to Sviatoslav, voice pitched low. “So the lot is cast. May it fall kinder than the last.”

Sviatoslav’s fingers tightened around his beads, gaze fixed on the bell, saying nothing.
 
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Another good chapter! The atmosphere is thick as thick can be.
 
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Another good chapter! The atmosphere is thick as thick can be.
Thank You! Chapter 3, it's a long one, and exciting (I hope you think so too) is coming soon!
 
Chapter 2 part 2: Spoils and Judgment

Polotsk’s great hall was colder than the road outside, the fire pit choked and the high timbers draped in smoke. The spoils of Novgorod—relics, gold, and the veche bell—were arrayed beneath flickering torches, watched by druzhina who did not speak. No feast marked the army’s return. Instead, the council gathered around the long table, every face turning, some wary, some hungry, all to Vseslav.

Sofia stood poised by her husband’s side, blue eyes calm but piercing, her bearing a deliberate blend of warmth and steel. Her hands never rested, quietly adjusting her sash, scanning for every shift in mood, her voice saved for moments when it would cut through noise like a blade. She missed nothing—the tension in Theodosius’s jaw, the way Sviatoslav’s fingers trembled as he traced the rim of a stolen icon.

Holy Father Sviatoslav lingered by the relics, a tall, broad, handsome man with hair cropped priest-short, his lips moving ceaselessly in half-voiced prayers. His right hand hovered over the icons, never quite touching, as if to do so might bring either blessing or ruin. His gaze darted often to the veche bell, suspicion and awe mingled in equal measure. Each breath, you could see the question: did God favor this raid, or had they earned only a curse?

Theodosius hunched over ledgers, feverish eyes flicking between columns of numbers, knuckles pale as bone. At thirty-one he was already marked by restless energy and the lingering shadow of illness; his meticulous penmanship betrayed not just discipline, but the anxiety of a man who knew that every error would be measured twice. Each time something clinked on stone, his head jerked up, as if catching a thief.

Yevdokia, the prince’s “tongue,” blended with the darkness by the wall, her slender frame swathed in sable, eyes half-lidded in the flicker of torchlight. Only eighteen, she watched the older men with a cruel sort of patience, a small amused smile twisting her lips as their voices clashed. When one of the stewards whispered to another, her attention flickered there, sharp and silent, as if weighing every secret for later use.

“We have won a great prize,” Vseslav announced, his voice low but carrying, the rough edge of fatigue clear beneath command. “But Polotsk’s fortune is not only gold. There will be consequences—for all of us.” His gaze swept the hall, lingering longest on Sviatoslav, who at last muttered, “Let us hope the saints favor boldness, this time.”

After the council, Vseslav slipped from the hall, boots silent on flagstones. In his chambers, Sofia followed, easing battered armor from his shoulders with hands practiced in both tenderness and strategy. “They look to you for certainty,” she murmured, brushing a dark strand from his brow. “But certainty is the one thing we never have.”

Rostislav waited just beyond the door—broad, battered, his half-face helm in the crook of his arm. He caught Vseslav’s eye and, for a breath, a rare smile broke his heavy features. “You brought us home, prince. The rest will follow. And if they don’t, let them try to stand against the druzhina next time.” With a glance to Sofia, he took up his post again, silent and loyal as a blade.

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In the days after the return from Novgorod, the halls of Polotsk echoed with tension and industry. The great bell crouched near the hearth, shrouded in furs, a monstrous, watchful presence amid stacks of looted coin and relics. Council was called in the bitter cold, torches painting nervous faces with shifting shadows.

Vseslav stood at the head of the long table, Sofia at his side, her eyes sharp above her heavy mantle. Sviatoslav muttered prayers over the icons, gaze flicking from loot to bell and back. Theodosius, hollow-cheeked and feverish, poured over ledgers, tallying every coin and tally-stick. Yevdokia, the prince’s tongue in the shadows, watched the assembly through half-lidded eyes, her secrets close.

When the time came to fill the council’s empty seats, Vseslav summoned those who had earned their place in blood or cunning—or, in the case of the newcomer, by reputation alone.

The first to enter was Koz’ma Kholmsky, sleeves rolled, mud still drying on his boots. His hands were wide and calloused, his eyes scanning the council with the wary calculation of a man who measured every road by its ruts and every prince by his patience. He spoke in a low, practical voice: “You want the wagons full, you keep my schedule. You want bread on the tables, you pay on time.” Laughter and unease mingled around the table. Vseslav’s nod was curt, the deal sealed with a loaf and a look.

Yosef, the new physician, followed with a battered satchel and a merciless steadiness. Sofia met him at the threshold, questioning with only her gaze. “I serve the living,” he replied. “For the rest, I leave the prayers to others.” His hands, already stained with blood and tincture, moved with the assurance of a man who did not waste words.

But the last to arrive—unannounced, nearly silent—was Zelekman. He appeared at dawn, thin and sharp, a silver amulet flashing at his throat. He carried a bundle of parchments and a battered stylus, eyes bright with a cautious, hungry intelligence. An outsider’s accent marked his first words: “Your accounts are unbalanced, your tribute reckoned short. Three icons missing, two debts unpaid, and one relic uncounted.”

The council bristled. Theodosius grunted. “Who counts another man’s gold in his own house?”

Zelekman answered without fear, “A city that loses track of its treasure loses track of itself. I’ve seen courts fall for less.” He laid the corrected tally on the table, precise and uncompromising.

Vseslav weighed the stranger’s words, reading not just their content but the man behind them. “And if I give you the ledgers?” he asked.

“I keep them as I keep a chronicle—honestly, thoroughly, without favor. Legend and ledger are both ink. I serve the story and the truth.”

A moment of silence passed—a quiet contest of will. Then Vseslav inclined his head, granting the post of steward and chronicler to the outsider. Whispers circled the room: “Jew, stranger, too quick, too clever…” But Vseslav only said, “A city is what its records remember. Begin your work.”

Yevdokia’s shadow lingered by the door, eyes narrowed as she sized up the newest arrival. Koz’ma, arms folded, offered a curt nod, as if recognizing a fellow laborer in the grim work of order. Yosef said nothing; the physician’s gaze lingered on Zelekman a moment, calculating as ever.

That evening, as torches guttered in the winter gloom, Zelekman was already at work—balancing coin and myth, chronicling not just the gold, but the rumor in every whisper and the legend in every boast. He moved quietly through the halls, neither welcomed nor rebuffed, speaking little but hearing all.

By the next day, gold began to flow where it should, and the first stories of the Sorcerer-Prince’s triumph—shaped by Zelekman’s pen—began to spread beyond the city gates.

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The first pale sun since the host’s return bled through the archways of Polotsk’s square, making every breath smoke in the frozen air. At the castle’s open gate, the veche bell crouched among the loot—enormous, battered, its hide wrappings gone, exposing old scars and Latin and Slavic prayers hammered into the bronze. No oxen or wagon waited; this was to be done by hand, as custom and penance both.

Vseslav stood at the head of the line, the folds of his black-and-blue cloak thrown back, a prince unafraid to soil his hands. Around him, the court formed—a tableau of ranks blurred by fear and hope. Koz’ma barked orders, sleeves rolled, jaw set, as he measured out the length of rope and the strength of each team. “No passenger’s share,” he muttered. “Every man pulls or none do.” His eyes flicked between druzhina, merchants, and nobles, ensuring even the reluctant ones found their place.

Trifon, broad and battered, laughed and spat on his palms before gripping the rope beside two red-faced merchants. Nikita, hawk-eyed and restless, tested each knot, murmuring the old words for luck and muttering warnings to any who slackened. Rostislav’s fists were already bleeding from some earlier contest, but he took his place without complaint, his glare enough to silence anyone thinking of shirking. Among them, a handful of nervous boyars—robes tied up to their knees, beaver hats askew—did their best to look equal to the task, some for honor, some for fear of being remembered otherwise.

Yosef moved quietly behind the ranks, his satchel of linen and tinctures ready. A murmur ran through the crowd as he knelt to bandage a farmhand’s palm before the work began. “No blood for the bell,” he muttered, “only sweat.” His tone brokered no argument.

Sofia was there too, her fur mantle standing out among the men. She watched the nobles and townsfolk alike, offering a nod to those who met her gaze and a word of encouragement to the children who crowded near. “One city, one burden,” she said, her voice even and public.

Yevdokia drifted through the gathering, pale and unreadable in sable. She caught every aside and secret look, weighing who whispered, who muttered, and who kept silent.

The bell and relics—icons, chalices, strips of battered silk—were placed on sturdy planks and beams. The procession moved at a crawl, each lurch sending new shivers through the rope teams. The people lined the lane: women in faded _ponevas_ and embroidered _platoks_ clutching infants, men in rough _rubashkas_ and fur vests, merchants with colorful sashes. Old women crossed themselves “old-style,” two fingers quick and sharp. Children hushed and watched, some clutching their fathers’ knees.

A merchant’s son and a veteran druzhina found themselves shoulder to shoulder, the boy’s breath quick and pale in the cold. The older man grunted, adjusted the grip, and together they heaved as one.

Through torch-smoke and incense the column wound, the weight so great the bell barely budged at each turn. Koz’ma adjusted the teams, Theodosius called out for caution whenever the ropes threatened to slip, and Zelekman, silver amulet bright against his tunic, counted each item and recorded who bore it.

At the threshold of St. Sophia, the procession stopped. Sviatoslav, in gold and linen, his hair cropped close, advanced with a battered _evangelie_ and a carved _kovsh_ of holy water. He paused, voice thin with strain, and chanted the blessing—intoning the trisagion and calling on the saints, the Theotokos, the hosts of angels to sanctify the relics and the bell, to forgive “the violence by which they came, and the hands that now receive them.” His hand shook as he traced the cross in the air and sprinkled water onto the bell’s battered crown. The crowd echoed each “Gospodi Pomiluy”—Lord, have mercy—each petition rising like breath into the rafters.

Incense poured from swinging censers, the scent of frankincense and birch mingling with sweat and the faint copper tang of cold iron. The choir intoned the psalm, and the whole city felt pressed between awe and dread, hope and the memory of blood.

The nobles—fur-collared, boots muddied, faces set—took up the rope in the next effort, their struggle as public as any peasant’s. Koz’ma called the rhythm, Trifon shouted encouragement, and Vseslav himself set his shoulder beneath the beam. A child cried out when a plank slipped, but was hushed by a merchant’s broad hand.

Yevdokia watched as the crowd weighed every gesture: who pulled with grit, who faltered, who shirked. Already, stories were being born.

When the bell finally came to rest in the shadow of the altar, Sviatoslav finished the prayer with a final trembling sign. The crowd, all classes together, exhaled as one—a silence thick enough to hear the snow drift outside.

What happened next would test their strength more than any blessing. But for that moment, prince and people, conqueror and conquered, thief and priest stood bound by a labor that made their prize—perhaps, for a breath—truly their own.

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The cold was absolute in the cathedral yard, the kind that burned fingers and numbed skin, even through felt boots and layered wool. St. Sophia’s was not much warmer, its doors flung wide. Only the pressing mass of people and their exertion provided a hint of warmth. Her belfry rose stark and unfinished against the pale blue sky. Inside, a timber scaffold rose into the belfry, burdened with heavy ropes, wooden blocks, hand tools, and men. The crowd pressed so close that the sound of breath and anxious prayer filled the air, thicker even than the freely flowing incense. The veche bell waited at the foot of the scaffolding, immense and mute.

Koz’ma’s voice rang out over the murmurs, brisk and sharp as an ax blade. Before he gave the signal, he pressed his fingers to his brow and then to the rough timber, murmuring a prayer just loud enough for those nearest to hear. “Strength comes to those who earn it,” he declared, his voice edged with conviction. “Teams to the lines! Mind your footing, mind your brothers, no heroics, no fools!”
He moved with purpose, mud still crusted on his boots, eyes sharp as he inspected each knot and length of rope, pausing to tug hard as if to test not just the cord, but the will behind it. When he set Rostislav at the front, where the pulling was hardest, Koz’ma gripped the man’s forearm in a wordless blessing, his gaze shining with something more than duty.

Rostislav moved forward as Koz’ma directed, cracking his thick knuckles and rolling his shoulders with a grunt. He eyed the bell, then the ropes, and gave a slow, crooked grin that showed no fear, only appetite for the contest. “If this beast means to kill a man, let it pick someone worth the trouble,” he rumbled, voice low and even. “Ready when you are.”

Trifon spat in his palm, eyes gleaming, his pride bruised at seeing a commoner set ahead of him in the labor. He flexed his battered fingers beside Rostislav. “We lift for Polotsk! And if this bell lands on my head, let it ring for my sins.” His laughter cut through some of the tension, even as his bravado drew snorts from the older men.
At his side, Nikita pressed two fingers to his lips and then to the bell itself, whispering a prayer for strong backs and sure knots, eyes darting warily to the clouds overhead.

Nobles and merchants, red-faced with cold, pride, and strain, tugged at their sashes and rolled up their sleeves. Koz’ma ordered a grumbling boyar into the thick of the ropes, and the old man, Borya—once famous for refusing to kneel—glared but obeyed, hands clumsy but fierce. “If the bell crushes us, perhaps the saints will get a better crop,” he muttered, though no one heard but Nikita, who grinned at the omen.

Sviatoslav hovered by the bell’s base, wrapped in gold-threaded vestments that seemed too thin for the cold. His lips worked ceaselessly. “Lord, have mercy… Holy martyrs Boris and Gleb, witness this offering… Intercede for Polotsk, turn wrath to blessing… Forgive what was taken, sanctify what is given.” A wooden icon was set upon a crate beside him, and, one by one, a handful of druzhina and laborers crossed themselves and joined his murmur. Nikita’s voice wove in with the bishop’s, a low chant in the old tongue, the kind mothers taught to frighten children and comfort the dying.

Theodosius hovered at the edge of the chaos, clutching his ledger tight, his face pale and eyes shadowed with fever. He counted out the teams and, unable to help himself, called out warnings. “Watch the left, Koz’ma, that beam’s notched! Don’t waste strength, save it for the last haul!” His thin voice, roughened by illness, was half-ignored, but his worry echoed in more than one set jaw.

The first attempt began at Koz’ma’s signal. “Now, Polotsk, pull!” The ropes went taut, muscles corded, boots slipped in the mire of slush and straw covering stone and mosaic floors. The bell inched upward in silence, its clapper removed, while the tackle moaned with a sound like the world’s oldest door creaking open.

As the timbers groaned, Theodosius caught Koz’ma’s arm, his voice low and urgent. “Hold back, the rigging isn’t right, wait…”
But Koz’ma, eyes burning, shook him off. “We are not in the land of the _Romaioi_, master Theodosius. Saint Boris did not pause for _Greki_ counting, nor did Gleb wait for permission from _Tsargrad_. They bore their burdens and did not look back.”
He jerked his chin toward the ropes, voice steady. “Strength and sweat speak louder than Greek ledger lines. In Rus', it’s the bold who are blessed.”
Theodosius drew himself up, indignation rising. “My blood has been in Polotsk since before—”
He never finished. The rope snapped with a sound like thunder, and chaos erupted as the bell lurched.

A rope whipped free with a thunderclap. The bell lurched, and a merchant’s son went down hard, shrieking as the rough cord tore and twisted his hands, flaying the skin from his palm. Another team staggered; the beam holding the pulley shifted dangerously. Panic rippled outward. Someone slipped from the scaffold, plunging into the crowd below. An old woman wailed, children screamed, and even Sviatoslav paused his ceaseless prayers. Yosef was already moving, sliding between men to reach the injured boy, his hands sure and steady, voice flat: “Breathe. Let me see. You’ll have your hand yet.” The boy moaned softly, his skin draining pale.

Trifon, furious, kicked at the broken rope and cursed, shaking blood from his hand. “Damn the bell and damn Novgorod!” Saying the city’s name drew a gasp and a hiss from the crowd nearby. “Where’s the prince, let him pull!”
A ripple of laughter followed, mixed with anger, but it died quickly.

Just then, a voice cut through the chaos, steady, unhurried, louder than it should have been. “Pull, Polotsk. You are not beaten yet.” Vseslav had appeared at the rope’s end, his cloak dark with old blood, his hands bare and clean. For a second, there was uncertainty. Some swore he had not been there a moment before. A mutter ran through the crowd: shapeshifter, they whispered, or wolf-prince, or simply a lord who moved where eyes slid away.

Vseslav’s eyes swept the crowd, neither angry nor pleading, and he took his place by the rope, beside the battered Trifon and the sullen boyar. “All that matters is the bell in its place. Pull with me, or stand aside.”

A moment’s hush followed, broken only by Nikita’s muttered prayers and Sviatoslav’s trembling voice, stronger now: “Christ be with us. Saint Sophia, witness.” Even Theodosius, white-knuckled, joined his voice to the call. Koz’ma, steadying the beam, nodded to the teams. “Now.”

The effort surged again. Ropes strained. Faces contorted with pain and determination. Sofia pressed close to the line, offering bread to the youngest laborers and a whispered word to Koz’ma: “You will be remembered for this, whatever happens.”

Sweat mixed with blood. Nikita, eyes wild, spat into the dirt and spat again, muttering of bad omens even as he pulled harder. Trifon grunted curses, bloodied, stubborn and unyielding, his bravado restored. The bell rose, trembling and uncertain, higher this time.

Sviatoslav pressed the icon to his chest, his voice ringing with desperate clarity. “Let the bell be made holy, let our hands be forgiven!” A druzhina beside him echoed the prayer, tears streaking his cheeks. The shouts and prayers rose into a roar that climbed the scaffold and reverberated in the belfry. The veche bell began to hum, vibrating with a sound that seemed miraculous.
Some of the men high on the scaffolding, overcome by the noise and the moment, sobbed openly. One fainted, pitching sideways and sending another crashing to the story below, earning both an injury and a grudge against his neighbor.

Finally, with a grinding groan, the bell cleared the final ledge. For a heartbeat, it seemed as if the whole world stopped. Koz’ma, breathless, shouted, “Hold steady! Ease it now!” His face shone with sweat and awe, his hands trembling on the rope.

Theodosius gasped, clutching his ledger as if it could ward off disaster. He pressed his fist to his mouth, eyes wide, too stunned to count. “Saints preserve us,” he whispered, the words barely audible.

On the scaffolding, Trifon let out a triumphant bark of laughter, pounding Rostislav’s back. “There! Let Novgorod hear us now!” Rostislav only grinned, breath coming in hard bursts, blood on his knuckles and pride in his eyes.

Down below, Sofia closed her eyes in silent thanks, then opened them, searching the faces of her people for doubt or relief. “It is done,” she said quietly, her voice carried by the hush.

In the crowd, an old woman fell to her knees, crossing herself again and again. “A miracle. A miracle, by the prince’s hand.” Children pressed forward, eyes wide with fear and wonder. Merchants embraced, shouting prayers and boasting in the same breath. Even the sullen boyar Borya, his face streaked with sweat and grime, wiped his brow and murmured, “So, the saints are with us after all.”

A silence spread outward like a ripple, no one moving, no one daring to be the first to speak. For that single moment, prince and people, court and commons, stood joined by breathless awe as the bell, finally and impossibly, hung in its new place.

For a heartbeat, it seemed the world was holding its breath. The silence was shattered as voices rose—not in one tongue or one faith.

Koz’ma, voice raw with relief, muttered a quick prayer to Boris and Gleb, but as he stepped back, he pressed three fingers to his brow, breast, and shoulders in the old, two-fingered style before crossing himself with the triple sign favored by the new order. Beside him, a young apprentice, hair tied with red cord, flicked his fingers to the earth and then to the bell, an ancient gesture meant to ward off the evil eye, unnoticed by most but not by Yevdokia, who watched from the edge of the crowd with narrowed eyes.

Trifon, chest heaving, made a loud, clumsy sign of the cross, then spat over his shoulder for luck, drawing a scandalized gasp from a merchant’s wife. Rostislav, sweat streaking his brow, whispered something to his dead ancestors, then tapped the bell’s rim twice, a habit from the north that some said brought good fortune.

An argument broke out near the steps as two old men disputed whether the bell’s safe raising proved the saints’ favor or owed more to the stubborn will of Polotsk’s people. “Boris and Gleb protected us!” one insisted, brandishing a battered icon. “No,” snapped the other, “it was the blood and bone of men, old gods still watch these stones.” His words drew a quick hush and sidelong looks, but in the swirl of victory, no one moved to scold or silence him.

Children, emboldened by the crowd’s joy, tossed a fistful of rye grains at the scaffold’s base, an old harvest rite barely remembered except at such moments. A woman in a faded _platok_ traced a circle in the dust with her thumb before joining the prayers, her face caught between laughter and tears.

Over it all, Sviatoslav, trembling but radiant, held his icon high and sang out a final “Gospodi pomiluy,” his voice answered by dozens more—some Orthodox, some not as much, some half-pagan, all Polotsk, unified for an instant by relief and awe.

For a breath, the city was one. The bell, bloodied, battered, and sanctified by labor, was theirs at last.

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As night fell, the city’s tension unraveled into noisy relief. St. Sophia’s square overflowed with people, their breath rising in clouds above firepits and torches. The bell’s deep hum seemed to linger in the bones of every man and woman present. Tables appeared as if by magic, laden with black bread, salt herring, boiled barley, and hunks of smoked pork, set out beside casks of honey-wine and the sour *kvass* beloved by every house.

Inside the great hall, the mood swung between exhaustion and wild celebration. Merchants raised toasts to the prince, claiming credit for every knot tied and rope pulled. Boyars clapped druzhina on the back, pride warring with the memory of their own faltering hands. Songs in every tongue echoed from the rafters—some Orthodox, some old as the rivers, many invented on the spot. Trifon stood on a bench, mug in hand, recounting his near-martyrdom beneath the bell to anyone who would listen. “If not for my quick feet, the saints would have another relic tonight!”

Yosef moved quietly from table to table, tending wounds and quieting bravado with brisk competence. He found Trifon bellowing at a crowd, one arm wrapped in a makeshift sling, the other waving a mug. Scowling as Yosef approached, blood crusted on his arm. “Out of my way, Zhid, I’ve had worse from a hungry sheep!”
A few at the table went quiet, but Yosef met the insult with the same steady hands. Sofia, appearing at Trifon’s side, cut the tension with a sharp word: “If you’d rather bleed into your cup, Trifon, there’s no shortage of fools to wager on it.”
Chastened, Trifon grumbled, letting Yosef work as Sofia watched.

Elsewhere, Koz’ma and Nikita shared a rare, wordless nod, each grateful to have survived the day. Rostislav, his knuckles still raw, was surrounded by children begging for stories. Theodosius, pale but alive, counted every cup of wine poured and made silent note of who had feasted most and worked least.

At the edges of the celebration, Yevdokia slipped among the revelers, ears sharp for whispered boasts, new rivalries, and quiet bargains. She noticed which boyar sat with which merchant, who offered gifts, who demanded a promise, who nursed a grudge. Already she saw alliances shifting, new debts owed, old ones quietly settled beneath the table.

Not all was peace—an apprentice who had taken a blow on the scaffold cursed a rival for clumsiness, but the fight was broken by laughter and the promise of more drink. A woman in a bright *platok* drew a circle in spilled grain and whispered thanks to both saints and old spirits. The sense of a city reborn ran through every song and every story told that night.

As the feast slowed, Sofia found Vseslav at the head of the hall, cup in hand, gaze distant as the firelight flickered. She joined him in the hush, setting her hand on his. “You’ve given them more than gold or victory, my prince,” she murmured. “Tonight you’ve given them a legend.”
Vseslav squeezed her fingers, tired but proud. “A legend, or a debt to fate. We shall see which it is.”
They sat in silence for a while, the bell’s memory humming through the floor.

Much later, when the fires had died and the hall emptied, Zelekman appeared at Vseslav’s side, his ledger and quill at the ready. “Shall I write this night as it was, or as it should be told?” he asked softly.
Vseslav looked past him, listening as the bell tolled one long, heavy note into the night. “Write it true, and let the telling do its work.”

Across Polotsk, the sound rang out, over rooftops, over the cathedral, through the packed, sleeping streets, echoing hope and myth into every home.
For this night, and for many after, the city’s burdens were shared, and its story belonged to all.
 
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Congratulations on a powerful start to your AAR. I enjoyed the three first chapters and I hope you continue. This story has real weight and promise. However I have mixed feelings, as Novgorod and Lake Ilmen are one of my favourite places (both in game and real life) and I would not like to see them savaged by the Polotskian (does that word even exists?) horde.

Chapter 3, it's a long one
This brings in a nice topic. What would be an optimal chapter length? I am thinking about 4,000 words ... what are your thoughts?
 
Congratulations on a powerful start to your AAR. I enjoyed the three first chapters and I hope you continue. This story has real weight and promise. However I have mixed feelings, as Novgorod and Lake Ilmen are one of my favourite places (both in game and real life) and I would not like to see them savaged by the Polotskian (does that word even exists?) horde.


This brings in a nice topic. What would be an optimal chapter length? I am thinking about 4,000 words ... what are your thoughts?
Thank you for the kind words! I'm trying to post a Chapter every two weeks. I have since combined Chapter 2 and 3 for ~4,700 words and Chapter 1 is ~3,200 words. My goal is at least 4,000 words. I haven't changed my headings etc in my posts yet. That is a good length for historical fiction; you need a lot of description, otherwise the work loses its sense of time and place. What's most important is the events in the chapter, so I could see a chapter of double that length working as well.
 
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What's most important is the events in the chapter, so I could see a chapter of double that length working as well.
Totally agree, but then maybe it can be split in two chapters with a nice cliffhanger.
 
Totally agree, but then maybe it can be split in two chapters with a nice cliffhanger.
As a reader I don't mind if a chapter splits a schene either, the chapter break may be appreciated too if its an intense chapter. So rules are ment to be broken!
 
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A long chapter undeed, but a good one. :)
 
Not to sound all "Winds of Winter" But here's a teaser. Stay tuned!

From the Chronicle of Zelekman, Steward and Pysar’ of Polotsk:

It is told that as the banner caught its first breath of wind, the bells of St. Sophia sang for a heartbeat, and the wolves in the pine beyond the city fell silent. Some said the bell sang with longing for its lost home. Others claimed it was an omen—a last warning from the city betrayed. Even the saints, it is said, leaned closer to the hearth to hear what name would be spoken in the dark. Old women whispered that Vseslav, born in a caul, could hear the bells of distant cities in his sleep. When the st’yag rose in Polotsk, his gaze turned east, and the lords of Kiev felt a weight in their dreams. Some called it envy; others, fear—as if the power of names and banners could wake the land itself to witness and remember. Whatever name the Novgorodians once gave it is lost now, swallowed by fire and winter. In Polotsk, they call it the Martyrs’ Bell, blessed in the names of Boris and Gleb, tolling not for the Yaroslavychi, those princes of Yaroslav’s house who named my lord’s line unfit for their table. Now let them count their heirs and tremble, for the Martyrs’ Bell rings only for Polotsk, and for a house reborn.”
 
I just finished reading your first post. The thing I like most about it is that your characters boast of their achievement in battle and looting, nobody truly seems proud of themselves They all seem just a bit ashamed of what they’ve done. Yet, I am sure they will do it again. I will definitely keep reading.
 
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Nice, solid work, @MichOrion. Extremely detailed character building, though I'm waiting for Yevdokia to more than slink in the shadows :).

Thank you for the kind words! I'm trying to post a Chapter every two weeks. I have since combined Chapter 2 and 3 for ~4,700 words and Chapter 1 is ~3,200 words. My goal is at least 4,000 words. I haven't changed my headings etc in my posts yet. That is a good length for historical fiction; you need a lot of description, otherwise the work loses its sense of time and place. What's most important is the events in the chapter, so I could see a chapter of double that length working as well.

There was a good discussion about serialization, including bits on post length and dialogue in the SolAARium, in case you are interested. I've always preferred the 'bite size' approach with a 'hook', or cliffhanger to whet the reader's appetite for more. Chapter 3 was a long read, but your use of paragraph breaks and 'white space' made it manageable. Personally, I would have split the chapter into two segments, with the rope snapping being a perfect cliffhanger.

That said, not everyone has the time for a long read, and that may turn off some people. Heaven knows, we're having enough trouble getting people to read other AARs so they can pass along the various awards without it going into the dreaded 'Open for Nomination' category.

Anyway, great start. I'll be checking this one out. BTW, I just noticed you've been around almost as long as I have.
 
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Your atmosphere is fabulous. It further confirms my belief that living in Russia at any moment in history is a dismal business. If you’re poor, the rich trample you. If you’re rich, the other oligarchs will eat you if you show weakness. It’s also really freaking cold.

I do agree with other readers about the length of your post, but I would offer another solution besides splitting your chapter. You have a lot of repetition and sometimes it gets distracting. See the quotes below.
Holy Father Sviatoslav lingered by the relics, a tall, broad, handsome man with hair cropped priest-short, his lips moving ceaselessly in half-voiced prayers. His right hand hovered over the icons, never quite touching, as if to do so might bring either blessing or ruin. His gaze darted often to the veche bell, suspicion and awe mingled in equal measure. Each breath, you could see the question: did God favor this raid, or had they earned only a curse?

Theodosius hunched over ledgers, feverish eyes flicking between columns of numbers, knuckles pale as bone. At thirty-one he was already marked by restless energy and the lingering shadow of illness; his meticulous penmanship betrayed not just discipline, but the anxiety of a man who knew that every error would be measured twice. Each time something clinked on stone, his head jerked up, as if catching a thief.

Yevdokia, the prince’s “tongue,” blended with the darkness by the wall, her slender frame swathed in sable, eyes half-lidded in the flicker of torchlight. Only eighteen, she watched the older men with a cruel sort of patience, a small amused smile twisting her lips as their voices clashed. When one of the stewards whispered to another, her attention flickered there, sharp and silent, as if weighing every secret for later use.
This felt almost verbatim to sections in your previous posts.

Vseslav stood at the head of the long table, Sofia at his side, her eyes sharp above her heavy mantle. Sviatoslav muttered prayers over the icons, gaze flicking from loot to bell and back. Theodosius, hollow-cheeked and feverish, poured over ledgers, tallying every coin and tally-stick. Yevdokia, the prince’s tongue in the shadows, watched the assembly through half-lidded eyes, her secrets close.
This is like a summary of the previous character description.

Yevdokia drifted through the gathering, pale and unreadable in sable. She caught every aside and secret look, weighing who whispered, who muttered, and who kept silent.
This is the third time that Yevdokia is described in almost exactly the same way.
Yevdokia watched as the crowd weighed every gesture: who pulled with grit, who faltered, who shirked. Already, stories were being born.
Here it is again.

I think with just one of these posts per chapter, you could establish what the characters are doing and, if they’re doing the same thing as the previous chapter, maybe it doesn’t add anything to the chapter to have them keep doing the same thing. You could skip it.

I’m curious about Yevdokia. I hope she makes an insightful report to the prince sometime soon with what she has learned.

I also hope you know that I am enjoying your story a lot. I hope my observations help you make it even better.
 
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It is told that as the banner caught its first breath of wind, the bells of St. Sophia sang for a heartbeat, and the wolves in the pine beyond the city fell silent. Some said the bell sang with longing for its lost home. Others claimed it was an omen, a last warning from the city betrayed. Even the saints, it is said, leaned closer to the hearth to hear what name would be spoken in the dark. Old women whispered that Vseslav, born in a caul, could hear the bells of distant cities in his sleep. When the st’yag rose in Polotsk, his gaze turned east, and the lords of Kiev felt a weight in their dreams. Some called it envy; others, fear, as if the power of names and banners could wake the land itself to witness and remember. Whatever name the Novgorodians once gave it is lost now, swallowed by fire and winter. In Polotsk, they call it the Martyrs’ Bell, blessed in the names of Boris and Gleb, tolling not for the Yaroslavychi, those princes of Yaroslav’s house who named my lord’s line unfit for their table. Now let them count their heirs and tremble, for the Martyrs’ Bell rings only for Polotsk, and for a house reborn.

Chapter 3: The Founding Part 1: Frost and Omens

Dawn shivered over Polotsk, laying a thin mist across the ancient palisades. Frost silvered each log, creeping into the joints where timbers had warped with time and rain. Scaffolds leaned against the ramparts, slick with hoarfrost, where carpenters had worked through the dark with tar-blackened hands, mending what years of neglect and lean coffers had wrought.

Prince Vseslav pressed his gloved palm to the parapet, then, removing the glove, bent to mark a small cross in the frost. It was an old habit, learned in childhood, a charm against loss that had long outlived its meaning. He paused, then gave a short breath through his nose, almost a laugh.

"As if the frost cares," he muttered, and wiped the mark away with the back of his hand, replacing the glove.

The cold stung, same as it always did, only sharper now for everything he hadn’t yet managed to keep.

Far below, the Dvina moved sluggish beneath a milky skin of ice. Hearth smoke drifted from the *dvor* (the household courtyards and dwellings near the inner ring), carrying the scent of pine and burnt millet. At the city’s edge, a watchman stamped his feet and traced the sign over his heart before pacing the tower walk. Each sound was muffled: a distant hammerfall, a muttered morning prayer, wheezing breath. The city seemed to hold its own exhale as it awoke beneath the pale sky.

Boots crunched behind him. Trifon Sheremetev arrived first, helmet tucked beneath one arm, his other hand pressed into his mouth as he packed cloves against a split tooth, the price he paid to the Martyrs’ Bell. He spat into the snow, a wordless ritual against the day’s misfortune, then scanned the horizon, eyes hard and bright with vigilance.

“Clouds holding, for now,” he grunted, not looking at the prince.

Vseslav watched Trifon for a moment, noting the tension in his jaw and the quick, restless way his gaze swept the wall. The air between them was cold and thin, filled only by the scrape of boots and the sound of distant hammers.

Theodosius followed, shoulders hunched inside a dark fur mantle, a wax tablet and stylus pressed to his chest. He moved carefully, breath catching with effort, his face drawn and pale from lingering illness. Pausing, he glanced at rooftops stained by old weather and the thin gray smoke curling from morning fires. Lips moving silently, he counted on his fingers, then made a careful mark in the wax. Each tally felt like a plea for the city’s luck to hold. When he looked up, his gaze held both calculation and apology.

Sofia moved quietly, her mantle drawn close, a lock of hair catching the morning’s first glow. She paused at Vseslav’s side and looked out over the alleys, where city women bartered at the bread cart. One tore a crust in half and pressed it, with a blessing, into a child’s hand. Sofia’s eyes softened at the gesture, but when she spoke, her voice was steady.

“People remember hunger longer than fear,” she said, watching the line form again. “It takes time for trust to come back.”

Yevdokia appeared last, her silhouette briefly sharp against the paling sky before she slipped into shadow at the base of a leaning timber tower. She paused beside a passing servant, whispered a few words, and the young woman crossed herself quickly before hurrying toward the inner gate. When Yevdokia joined the others, she remained at the edge, her gaze never still, flickering from the city gates to the workmen patching the breach along the north wall. Without turning her head, she spoke.

“There’s talk of a merchant’s son gone missing in the night. Too many strangers in the city. The quartermasters report two carts of rye lost.” Her eyes found Sofia’s, then Vseslav’s. She was not seeking approval, only acknowledgment.

For a moment, the council stood together at the wall’s edge. Above them, frost glittered and the city’s breath curled upward, each exhale a silent vow to endure. No one spoke of last week’s victory. The years etched in timber, and the hush that followed, spoke for themselves.

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By midmorning, the ramparts rattled with the sound of labor. Carpenters hunched over scaffolding, hands wrapped in rags to keep out the frost, wooden pegs held between their teeth. A young apprentice dabbed some lard onto the first timber, a small gesture for luck, before passing it up the human chain. Koz’ma, the *starosta* of the works, sleeves rolled, barked orders as his breath steamed in the cold. “Move the axle. Not there. If it slips again, I’ll have your teeth for dowels.” The men laughed, but only a little, each gripping their tools with the fierce care of a *smerd*—a man who could ill afford a broken tool.

Grumbling moved like a tide among the workers. Backs ached and tempers ran short; supplies ran thin. A woman came pleading for more rye, clutching a charm woven from last year’s straw, her request lost in a shout for rope. Theodosius stood off to the side, his wax tablet clutched in numb fingers, marking off beams and iron fastenings as if each tally might keep the city standing a day longer.

At the north breach, Trifon jabbed his spear into the half-frozen ground, scowling at the sagging fence line. “Anchor it here, or you might as well hang a welcome for every raider in the north. The mud will swallow it come thaw.” He spat and muttered a half-hearted prayer to the saints, wincing as he did. “Get it set before dusk, unless you like arrows waking you up.”

Rostislav rolled a splinter of pine between his fingers, brow raised. “You want it straight, you’ll need more than prayers and noise. Maybe next time, try a hammer instead of a spear.” He kicked at a warped beam, lips twitching. “You build like you fight—fast and loud, and I fix it after.”

Trifon snorted, stabbing the earth for emphasis. “If you want it perfect, wait for spring and a new crew. Or else put your back into it and quit talking.”

Rostislav grinned. “You first, hero. My back’s been here since sunrise.”

From the rampart above, Sofia watched the quarrel and the labor that followed. Trifon and Rostislav moved with a kind of stubborn grace, strong and restless, so sure in themselves that even an argument had the easy rhythm of practice. She let her gaze linger for a heartbeat longer than was needed, then caught Koz’ma’s eye and nodded, her approval quiet but solid as stone.

Meanwhile, Yevdokia slipped between the wagons, cloak drawn tight against the morning cold. She knelt beside a boy, too young for the levy but already eager to be useful. Her question was gentle, her voice low so that only he heard: “Have you seen anyone new? Anyone who does not belong?” The boy shook his head, wary but curious. Yevdokia pressed a copper with a hole through it into his palm, a small price for sharp eyes or silence, then moved on, leaving only footprints in the frost.

Each answer, true or false, added another thread to her web. The city bristled with rumor and strangers, the scent of new money tangled with old fear. Somewhere in that tangle she would find what she and Polotsk needed: proof if it could be found, or something that would serve well enough when the time came.

By day’s end, the work slowed as hunger and cold took their toll. From the battered timbers and the silent bell, the breath of the city rose in pale ribbons, hope and hardship mingled in every wisp.

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At the edge of the scaffold, where the wind howled just beyond but the boards held a pocket of quiet, Sofia drew Sviatoslav and Yevdokia aside. Their voices stayed low, breath mingling with the dry evening air. Sviatoslav worked his prayer beads, the rhythm silent but insistent.

"Word travels fast. Our riches are no secret. The neighbors will not watch Polotsk grow strong and stay silent," Sofia murmured. "Men from Braslav were seen at the market yesterday. Trifon thought they looked more like Lithuanians than our own folk, with an accent to match, buying only candles and salt. That’s no honest trading."

Sviatoslav frowned, his mantle drawn up to his ears. "Pagans or not, they watch the border. I saw smoke westward at dawn. That was no farmer’s fire."

Yevdokia’s eyes narrowed. She traced a sign in the slush with the tip of her boot, a habit for luck or misdirection. The old priest paused nearby, his gaze flickering, just as she let her mantle fall away from one leg. It was nothing more than a shift in her step, but enough for the wool of her skirts to catch tight at her calf.

He lingered a moment longer than necessary, lips pursed in silent judgment or longing. Yevdokia let him look, then turned her attention back to Sofia and Sviatoslav, her expression giving nothing away.

"Names whispered by men who never buy, only listen. One of the merchant’s runners vanished at the granary. Most likely paid to forget, or to carry word back west."

Sofia let the silence settle, the weight of worry pressing at her shoulders. "If there is danger, better to name it than wait for it to find us. The prince should know."

Sviatoslav’s fingers moved restlessly over the beads. "Better to act first, but if we force a claim, we should be certain. Half-truths and old rumors do not make justice, not in the eyes of God nor man."

Yevdokia’s smile was a thin, sharp thing. "We make our own omens. Tell the prince there is proof, or what will pass for proof. Better to act than to be cornered."

Below them, carpenters and *artels* (work-gangs of the city) on the wall began a low, wordless song, the old tune meant to stiffen wood and heart. As their voices drifted upward, the three counselors knew the city’s fate rested not only on coin or courage, but on the stories they chose to tell next.

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Theodosius braced a strip of birchbark against a crate by the granary, charcoal flicking numbers as he squinted into the bitter wind. Each sum felt like a small defeat; the more he counted, the thinner hope became. Koz’ma appeared, shaking snow from his boots, and handed over a tally stick, wood nicked with fresh notches for each loss.

“Iron spikes gone missing. Grain drawn down again last night. Someone’s hand was quick, or the rats are better fed than we are.”

He barely glanced up, jaw set. “The money is nearly spent. Too many mouths, too few hands.” His voice dropped as workers hurried by. “Every day we build, the treasury empties. If we mean to move against Braslav, better to do it before they do. The men will want a reason, let’s hope the right story finds us when the time comes.”

Koz’ma gave a humorless laugh, rubbing a coin between his fingers as if to conjure more. “A city building strong walls draws merchants with gold, and wolves with sharper teeth. No city ever saved itself waiting for permission. Better to take what we need before someone else does. I’d burn the fields myself before I’d starve slow.”

Near the shadow of the granary door, Yevdokia spoke, her tone so even it chilled the men around her. She had gone unnoticed again.

“They already think twice before testing our gate. Every empty bin here is a feast for a hungry neighbor. Wait too long and we will find the knife inside the city, not outside.”

Sofia, hands folded within her sleeves, watched townsfolk gathering up goods at the market, exchanging quiet words over furs and grain. “We are surrounded by risk, and not all of it comes from beyond our walls. If there is a way to secure our border, we must seize it, but not so quickly that hardship becomes our new master.”

Their voices ebbed and flowed like snowflakes drifting into the corners of the yard. The cold pressed harder as the sun slid behind low clouds, and even the carpenters’ hammers seemed to ring with weariness.

Trifon arrived, shaking sawdust from his coat, a scowl cut deep in the lines of his face. He tossed a broken board aside and planted his feet square in the dirt. “Wait for saints or signs and we’ll all freeze before spring. The men will fight if they are fed. Give them bread and purpose, and Polotsk will not fall.”

Rostislav stood with his arms crossed, silent but for the tap of his thumb on the hilt of his knife. “We barely hold what’s ours now. Push against Braslav and we could lose everything.”

Across the courtyard, Zelekman snapped his ledger closed, ink stains trailing from his pen. “Sometimes a story is worth more than a sword. If we act boldly, others may hesitate to move against us, or they may decide our story is only that, and call the bluff. Stories do not fill the granary nor mend broken bones, but they have their worth.”

Sviatoslav fingered the beads at his wrist, eyes flickering between the faces around him. “There is justice in the claim, but no priest can promise blessing or victory. We know the price, and who will pay it.”

Yevdokia’s gaze found Sofia’s. “Every path is dangerous. The only choice is which danger we can live with. Let our message be clear, or we invite doubt and betrayal.”

The debate circled and sharpened, drawing old divisions into the open. Even the wind seemed to lean in, carrying away the last warmth of the day.

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