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Since I had aroused my own curiosity, I decided to look it up. Turns out Konstantinos was born in 1404 and was the brother of Ioannes (and therefore the son of Emperor Manuel II). That makes him quite a young man to assume control of the army, but I guess that's imperial prerogative. :)

Looking forward to more! more! more! :D
Even if it means I'll have to wait! wait wait! :p
 
just finished reading everything up until now.

WoW!

very impressive writing! :)
 
Warning this post contains graphic and intimate descriptions of sexual character

Chapter Five

Intermezzo

Arn sat at the table in his father’s study, looking at the broken pieces of the staff, once a symbol of power, now merely two pieces of wood and a few golden fragments.
His father had left soon after they returned, and really Arn should have been heading home to his family, but he kept starring mesmerized at the broken staff, as if it held the answers to all of his questions.

Finally he got up slowly and went to the door, it was darkening outside and he pulled his cape closer, a sudden chill overcoming him. The news from the Emperor had him worried, the brother, Konstantinos?, was an unknown entity and the Turks, well the Turks. Time would tell. He had never met the Turks, not in combat nor in any particular capacity, but the stories of his childhood and the institutional fear of them in the army was a thing he was very, very aware of.

Arn followed the main roads home, even for an experiences soldier, alleyways in the city was not to be trusted after dark. Moments later he stopped in front of his house. He stood for a moment admiring it. It was newer than his fathers, and a little bit smaller, but he had a fair-sized lot behind that could be build on, and what most people didn’t know was the he owned both houses on either side, a sort of present from Sif’s parents.

Arn stood for a while lost in thought, contemplating how he would give the news to his wife, and wondering why it was that he had settled down in a way much like his father, same kind of house and a career in the army, strange how you patterned yourself after your parents.

Finally he stepped in to the lighted doorway and was greeted by a servant. Leaving his cape in the care of the man, he went deeper in search of his family. He found them all huddled in the small cozy living room in front of a newly lid fire, the first of the season. As his children rushed up to greet him, his wife shot him a look over their heads, wondering why he had been away for so long, and where he had been. Arn nodded subtly, indicating all was well, and he would tell her later. She smiled and nodded in understanding, the children would soon be sent off to bed with a favored maid and then they could talk.

Arn went down on one knee and hugged the two children, how fast they seemed to grow, his daughter the oldest, was nearly four, fought for a place in his lap by stemming her small feet on her three year old brother’s stomach. Arn couldn’t help but smiled as he scooped both of them up in his arms and carried them over to the fire. They sat together for a short while before the nanny appeared in the doorway, Arn nodded and she entered and led the protesting children away, he stood up and fetched a goblet,

“Do you want wine?” His wife nodded and leaned back on a huge pillow.

Arn took of his belt and sank down beside her, careful not to spill, sipping the good wine from the conquered areas. He wife leaned closer and took her goblet,

“So?”

“Well, as we feared, my father have been replaced as Marshal.” He paused and sighed, Sif, didn’t speak, merely reached up and touched his chin.

“It’s not as bad as it sounds, my father remains general and his seat at the Council, I remain in command of the New Army,” his voice trailed off.

“And the brother takes command of the other army and the entire forces of the Empire as Marshal?”

“Well yes and no, I still refer to the Emperor, and my father, well I don’t know, I had thought he would have taken this army, but the Emperor left the defense of this city unsolved, at least when old Filipo retires.”

Sif didn’t answer but placed her goblet on the floor and moved behind, Arn leaned back as she began rubbing his shoulders and let the day slowly bleed out of his body. For a long time nothing was heard but the silent crackle of the fire.

Then, as the fire grew low, Sif’s arms began to reach forward and stroke his chest, Arn smiled to himself and let the sensation flow through his body, nobody would disturb them, there was no need to latch the door. Slowly her hands became more daring, venturing below his tunic, he tried to turn, but her strong arms pushed him back, he smiled again and enjoyed the sensation, could feel her smile through her arms.

The fire had burned very low by now and Arn tilted his head back and looked deeply into her eyes, Sif smiled and offered her lips, Arn reached up and held her head, this time she didn’t resist, he kissed her deeply and then tried to reach her, to caress the treasures of her body, but it was awkward. She sighed and allowed him to disentangle, he carefully stood and threw a few logs on the dying fire, then he latched the door, just as a precaution and turned back towards the carpets on the floor.

He almost stopped dead in his tracks, Sif had managed to catch him off guard, using those few moments of inattention, while walking to the door and back.

She stood in front of the fire naked, in all her womanly splendor, only her hair let loose to partially cover her. He took one step forward, she looked like a creature of myth, as she stood there, glowing red from the fire. She was looking demurely towards the floor, but Arn knew it to be ruse, she was most likely smiling, under her hair. Silently he lifted his tunic over his head and approached her, stark naked.

She didn’t move, didn’t make a sound as he silently embraced her, their naked bodies meeting. Slowly he put his arm around her and with his other hand lifted her head. Her hair fell away from her face and she had closed her eyes, but Arn could see the mirth bobbling inside her.

He kissed her again, slowly at first, on the lips, on her brow, then slowly he leaned down and kissed her neck, craning her neck she murmured low sounds of pleasure as he kissed her throat and the nape of her neck.

Arn carefully broke the embrace and kneeled holding her, their bodies exactly not touching, slowly his lips moved down over her body, her shoulders, her back, slowly, ever so slowly he covered her with soft kisses.

At first she didn’t move, savoring, drinking in the sensation, enjoying his lips and coarseness of his stumbled chin on her soft skin. Then as the tingling of her skin grew unbearable she tried to direct his head, but to no avail. She raised her arms and started caressing his body, tracing the muscles as the twisted under her hands, moving along the ridges of the scars that covered his body. As his lips reached her stomach, skipping her longing nipples, she could feel her muscles involuntarily contract in anticipation of what was to come. She leaned over and as he had to go down on both knees to lick her navel, she reached down and traced his spine with her tongue.

Feeling her tongue dart up and down his back caused him to shudder with pleasure, with a low groan he slid behind her and pressed his hard body against hers, grapping her breast firmly with both hands.

Sif almost whimpered with delight, letting her hand trace up to his neck pulling his head forward for a kiss and the other reaching back grabbing him pulling him closer. Arn squeezed her carefully, and felt her legs grow weak below her. Slowly he lowered her to the carpet and laid down beside her, she slid onto her back and opened her eyes looking deeply into his.

Arn felt something burst inside him, like always and reached over to caress her body, she stretched like a cat and opened up, inviting him to explore. Slowly he rediscovered the hidden parts of her body, taking pleasure in seeing her loose control and enjoying his touch.

Finally on the brink of being carried away, she pushed him away forcefully, surprised he let her do it. She smiled wickedly and pushed him onto his back. Slowly she took him in her hand massaging, before finally opening up, climbing atop his body she lowered herself unto him, covering them both in her hair.

*****


They both had dozed of, floating in the aftermath, drowsily caressing each other until their limbs had grown heavy. The fire had long gone died leaving only a few embers to glow weakly in the ashes, when Arn awoke.

At first he didn’t know what had disturbed his slumber, perhaps he was getting cold? Then he could he a distant pounding, as if somebody was hammering on something. He sat up, careful not to wake Sif. There it was again, somebody was pounding on the gate, moments later he could hear movement in the house, somebody had gone to inquire, he shook Sif, in moments they would try the bedroom, then here, unless it was a mistake.

Drowsily they dressed and Arn kicked the embers together and lighted a small oil lamp. Moments later a low tapping on the door could be heard. Arn opened and revealed the trusted Major Domo and behind him an unknown man, bearing the Emperor’s insignia. Arn felt an eminent dread coming from this messenger, and he never paid heed to the old servants excuses.

Quickly he dismissed the old man and ushered the guest inside, closing the door behind him. The man looked at Sif, but on receiving a nod from Arn he produced a small seal, indicating he was indeed an Imperial courier.

Arn gestured for the man to continue,

“I have come from the Emperor himself, tonight the Turks have broken our treaty, we must expect them to declare war before dawn, please return to your army and ready it, yours are the only army within reach of the city. Once you are sure of your army’s status, you are to return to the city for consultations, no later than three days from know.”

Having delivered the message the man’s face softened, “I have delivered the same message to your father and the commander of the city defenses, and a fast ship have left for Morea and the new Marshal. I’m sorry that we had to live to see this day:”
 
:eek:


How naughty!
a sexual aar!
:eek:

(your writing is still good though:))
 
Wow, a love scene, and a quite tasteful one at that. I think you did well in steering clear of the greasy cliché and the vocabulary that, used since the time of the writing of Fanny Hill, is merely ridiculous. Thumbs up for that.

I don't know if it was intentionally or not, but you seem to have used commas a lot, even where a full stop or a semicolon might have worked better for flow of language or dialogue. Then again, it could have been intentional by you, to create a certain hastiness. :)
 
KB, and Stuyvesant, thank you very much, glad you liked it :)

No it isn't my day job ;) But i thought I needed something to contrast the message of war :D

Sytass, no the use of commas was only intentional as a mean of hurrying along in the messenger from the emperor,

Using it during the love scene was meant as a way of showing the interrupted flow of thought and emotion the IMHO is part of any loveact, thus the constant interruption of stimuli and senses and thought.

V
 
Well thank you kind sir :)

I've just reread the last two sections, and while I'm happy with the content, I've discovered several typos, missing words and misplaced punctuation :(

I'm going to try and fix those next week, but first priority will be to update this story more often,

As stated earlier, I will heed Storey's advice and only update when I can complete a chapter within a reasonable time frame, so holes may still appear, but i will finish the Turko-Roman wras, as originally intended :D

V
 
Very good, as I've come to expect. You asked for a critique, so, as has been pointed out, you should pay more attention to proofing and punctuation. Some descriptions could be tighter. (ie: there's a lot of extra 'the'(s) and 'that'(s) that can be pruned) But those are minor nits. :)

Oh, and one more thing -- kiddies could be reading this... ;)

BTW, John was the eldest of six. The others in order were Theodore, Andronicus, Constantine, Demetrius and Thomas.
 
Valdemar saw your call for criticism in the bAAR and decided to pay your AAR a visit (did that earlier too but forgot to post). Since I am not a native speaker I can´t contribute that much but I will do my best.

I think you writing are of high-quality (honestly) and I could only find a couple of minor mistakes in the text (partly by running a spelling program). The story has a nice flow and is unproblematic to read. By that I am only referring to my ability to understand what you are writing. It reminds me pretty much of your style in the FC actually.

In all nice writing and a lovely description of an “adult encounter” though you might get whacked if you develop the style one step further :D
 
Originally posted by Lord Durham
Very good, as I've come to expect. You asked for a critique, so, as has been pointed out, you should pay more attention to proofing and punctuation. Some descriptions could be tighter. (ie: there's a lot of extra 'the'(s) and 'that'(s) that can be pruned) But those are minor nits. :)

Proofing, yes I know, I write when the whim drives ;) and I'm sloppy when it comes to proofing, as to punctuation, I find it hard, I think what coems unto paper is a mixture of correct english, Danish and what feels right, when saying the sentence out loud.

As the "the" and "that", i had no idea they could be abandoned, I'll try that next time around :9

Originally posted by Lord Durham

Oh, and one more thing -- kiddies could be reading this... ;)

Hence the warning ;)

Originally posted by Lord Durham

BTW, John was the eldest of six. The others in order were Theodore, Andronicus, Constantine, Demetrius and Thomas.

I trusted you to know this :D

Thanks both, It is appreciated :)

V
 
Originally posted by Valdemar

Hence the warning ;)
Always have a comeback, don't you? ;)

Punctuation is not easy. Getting the feel for it is harder. Perhaps I'll write something in the SolAARium about it.
 
Originally posted by Lord Durham
Always have a comeback, don't you? ;)

But off course isn't that the point of discussing, (and arguing) :D

Though I've become wary in the OT lately, one of my fellow betas and a Canadian seem to be so tightly wound that talking to them is dangerous :D

Originally posted by Lord Durham
Punctuation is not easy. Getting the feel for it is harder. Perhaps I'll write something in the SolAARium about it.

That would be very apreciated :)

V
 
Chapter Six, Part I

Arn sat on his horse on the top of one of a low rise, surveying the land before him. Behind him his army was occupying the hills that rolled endlessly away from the river.

From his vantage point he could see the closed city, from which small parties still ventured out to burn away farmsteads and crops in the vicinity of the city, before retreating back behind the walls. The young general let his eyes follow the expanse of the wall until it got lost in the distance. Such a marvelous work, a feat not possible to duplicate in his time. They had spent the last couple of years trying to repair the wall, but he feared that the greatest task would be to man it.

He shrugged looked closer to his own position, below him flowed the river that supplied the city with water, and while the cisterns would provide able supply to the diminished population the waterway was still a strategic consideration.

Before him he could follow the river as it snaked its way to the walls, the hills giving way to flat farmland, good for supplying the city and plenty of open ground to survey from the walls, but also good foraging for the beast and men of a besieging army. He lets his gaze trace left, across the river along the plain, in the far distance there were a slight disturbance in the just over the horizon, it could be nothing or it could be a small brushfire, but Arn knew what it was, it was the vanguard of the Turkish army, the siege army that Murad had gathered in the east after securing the deep inland of his domain.

Scouts had reported the crossing days ago, small skiffs coming down to the harbor to report the movements in the east, fast galleys had been dispatched to Venice with a call for help, but if the crossing was complete, then the vaunted navy of the Italians was worth nothing, except as blockade runners. Their own navy, Arn knew, was already at see, hoping to catch parts of the Turkish fleet before they could gather their strength.

Rumor had it that Murad had gathered two armies, one to besiege the city and one to conquer the land and pillage. Arn marveled at that if it was true, to gather so many men, when he was bound to also leave forces in his newly conquered territories in the south and east.

Upon hearing the news Marshal Konstantinos had immediately dispatched his army to Turkish Macedonia in an attempt to conquer this rich province before the Turks could garrison it and thereby connecting the Empires provinces in the south with the heart in the city. Arn could not fault the decision, it was bold, but most likely this would be where the force of the Turks would fall the hardest, upon the main army of the Empire.

He forced his gaze away from the horizon and looked closely at the hills behind him, along the river. Even to his trained eye it was not possible to see that his entire army was ready less than one hours forced march behind him. No tracks or telltale signs of a marching army. They had left by the southernmost gate and marched towards Macedonia as if they were to link up with the main army.

Two days way from the city they had doubled back and into the hills approaching the city along the river. Arn hoped this gamble would pay off; it was his attention to ambush parts of the Turkish army, hopefully delaying them enough to allow the Venetians to come to their aid. He shuddered, it was a gamble indeed, if the Turks knew they were here, it would be a lost battle at best, and a massacre at worst.

He motioned to his staff behind him and Angelo and Alexios trotted forward to meet their commander, silently he pointed to the horizon and both men sat in silence and took in the scenery.

“It will be at least another day before their vanguard reaches the city, I want the force to pull back another half days march and camp, leaving only scouts and one thousand men at the position were they are now. Just enough to ambush a scouting and raiding party.”

Both sub-commanders nodded. That was well within what was to be expected, now came the hard part, waiting to see if the Turk played along.

Alexios stirred his horse, his men were appointed to make the most likely charge, “any news from the scouts? Are we certain about the size of the force?”

Arn merely shook his head, but Angelo ventured a guess, “If I was Murad, then I’d leave a small force here, enough to start the siege, make preparations, start camp and siege works, and then take the bulk of the army and confront Konstantinos, after all, he is the major threat to their siege.”

Arn nodded, “That will be our chance, to attack the siege force, perhaps only with the cavalry, hoping to draw them into the hills and the main infantry force.”

Both lieutenants nodded and solemnly the three commanders rode back below the ridge and gave the necessary orders.

It was late night and cold in the camp, no fires had been lit, when a messenger rode into camp, bringing news that the Turks had crossed the river in force and was beginning to search the countryside next to the city.

Arn dismissed the messenger and sent an aid to tell his commanders to have the army ready at first light, then he rolled up in his blanket and went back to sleep.

The morning dawned beautiful and clear and a low mist shrouded the wet meadows between the hills. Slowly the army broke camp and waded like mythical creatures through the low fog. Arn steered his mount to top of yet another of the small hills overlooking the army. He felt a pride swelling when he saw how well they broke camp and began the march, searching around the hills like water always moving, never caught up in tangles, his sergeants truly doing their work.

The sun rose slowly casting long shadows in the deep valleys between the rounded hilltops. The New Army moved carefully towards the position of the vanguard and the scouts. Messengers appeared more regularly now, as they got closer to the enemy and Arn began to get a picture of the enemy forces, the main army seemed to have arrived during the night and moved to enclose the city by moving along the plain, following the great wall, while the siege train and parts of the army was still caught on the other side of the river, protected by a number of regiments and a rear guard.

So far it seems that even though some of his scouts must have been spotted, the Turk was satisfied with occupying the ground around the city, but Arn was sure that soon, very soon larger foraging parties would be issuing from the main host.

Murad himself was rumored to be with the main army somewhere to the right of the small Byzantine armies current position, if the Turkish banners was anything to go by. Arn paused and allowed his staff to regroup around him,

“We have two options here gentlemen,” He grinned, “Well three if we count withdrawal,” The others smiled uneasily, “alright two options then,” He dismounted and sketched the area in the lush grass with the tip of his dagger.

“This is the walls, this approximately,” He cut of an oval lump of grass, “is the position of the main army, according to the scouts they are still heading slowly south, not spreading out to cover the wall,” He looked up at the assembled officers, “perhaps Angelo is right, perhaps they will strike at Konstantinos first and secure that rich province for supplies and easy transfer across the water?”

“What of the siege train and remainder of the forces?” Angelo looked at Alexios.

The cavalry commander shrugged, “Scouts report that they are still crossing the river, mostly local levies, but also Jannisars and Sipahis, no telling if this is a second army or merely the rearguard, however some supply trains have crossed, but nothing like the amounts we would be expecting if they were to begin a siege. Until they hoist a second standard of command or the large army moves further away from the viscinity of the walls, there is no way of telling.” He looked at Arn, “I have given orders to the scouts not to attempt crossing the river yet, so we have no sure way of knowing how much more is to come.”

The General nodded in acceptance, keeping the close to fifteen thousand man strong army hidden was hard enough, but sooner or later he would have to commit. He allowed his mind to listen to his subordinates’ suggestions with only half an ear while he contemplated his options, the longer he waited the greater the risk of detection, but committing without knowledge was hard. Finally as the conversation around him subsided, all that could be said was said, he looked at his men again, looking deeply at each individual face, noting the confidence in him, in the men, in the Empire.

They would have to strike soon,

“I’ve decided on a course of action. Give me a map of the river area.” An aid unrolled the precious parchment. “I want the following deployment. Alexios, I want you to split your force two groups one of three one of two thousand men. The large one is to be positioned here,” Arn pointed at a point slightly up river, right behind the first row of hills on this side of the river, “the second group I want to cross the river higher up stream and position in a similar position on the other side, but spread further out.”

Alexios nodded and looked for confirmation from his sub-commanders. Arn turned to Angelo,

“I want the infantry deployed like this, one group right next to the cavalry on this side, and one smaller group, say two thousand men?” Angelo nodded, “Deployed along the ridge, protecting the flank of the first group.”

Angelo nodded again, “you want the first to be a strike force along with the cavalry and the second to protect them and prevent that they get enveloped and still have a way out?”

“Exactly, now I want a third group, perhaps as much a five thousand, more than a third of your force to retreat up the river valley and prepare both an ambush and some defensible positions we can withdraw to, we have to plan for a retreat, even with the element of surprise and the large army moving away from us we are vastly outnumbered.”

Angelo looked sceptical, “Those defensive positions will not be ready today, there is at least two hours march up the river before the valley becomes narrow enough to be of any use, even if we cut cross the bends from here.”

“I know, but I dare not wait another night, we will move into position now, and appraise the situation again, after all it will take hours to complete the attack and for our forces to march back to those positions, my guess is the Turks will not reach them before tomorrow, if at all.”

Angelo nodded, “I will stay with the strike force and you,” he pointed to a young man, “you will have the honor of preparing the ambush, use the trust wisely.”

Arn hid a grin in his hand as he saw the young man pale and sink something, but he saluted without a word and went to separate the necessary men from the main host.

“Are we agreed? We should be in place before the first hour after noon, then I’ll know if we can strike at the Turk, Alexios, make sure all scouts reports to me too, especially if that first army of Murad’s seems to be stopping or committing to the siege.”
 
and then again you leave us hanging....:D

great writing.