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Wow, i will certainly follow. Well writen, promising premise and good characters.

If i am allowed to offer one point of criticism, or at least ask about one thing (and take this with a small continet of salt, as i have zero experience in narrative writing), it seems a bit strange to change point of view in the middle of a chapter (as in, between Bartomeu and Sofia). Unless it is a concious decision and you are going somewhere with it of course. It's not a bad thing by any means, it's just a bit unusual.

Anyway, glorious stuff. Subscribed.
 
Stylistic decision that I'm experimenting with. :) I'm aware it's unusual, but hopefully it won't be too confusing once I get the hang of it (first time).

Sofia is becoming a rather interesting character ..

Very interesting and well written piece! Sofia is a most interesting character, and she seems to have a very confident and dangerous feel about her.

Great! My biggest problem is characters, so I'm glad to see you both thought the same thing.
 
Chapter 4 - The Most Persuasive Crown

Hi everyone. So, it's been several months since I've last posted here but my new year's resolution was to write more since I have a serious problem with dedication. As such, I'm reviving this. I still remember a good deal of the story I have planned, and the game itself wasn't very far along so I'll just restart it.

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Paris, France
1399

Phillipe stroked his beard, the wine in front of him laying untouched, mocking him as it sat on the table. His room was nearly unadorned except for the table in the center he was currently sitting at and a bed in the corner. The once great man had been reduced to this, sitting alone in a mediocre district of the capital reserved for the less well-to-do of merchants, drinking vintage, from The Baleares of all places, that was but a few years old. How long ago was it now? He had been the finest diplomat in the world, almost on the cusp of breaking into the upper nobility by the King's grace, with a county to rule all his own. Oh, how he had fallen..

All because of one day. One mere day where he had failed to negotiate the removal of Burgundy from the Empire. His Majesty had been only slightly angered at first, but became more and more infuriated over time. He had failed to see how impossible the task was. Even now, Phillipe shook his head and laughed. Not even he could persuade the Emperor to abandon such an influential duke. The estate he had been granted was revoked, and he was told quite sternly that he was fortunate to escape imprisonment. Ah, such was the burden of working for such a demanding tyrant. Since that day he had wanted to get back into grace. He missed Charles. Not this one, of course, but the one he still called His Majesty without any hint of sarcasm. Charles the Wise, the one who had so skillfully restored his country and was unfortunate enough to pass it onto a man who seemed poised to ruin it thoroughly.

Phillipe only now turned his attention to the letter sitting unopened on his desk, and opened it carefully with a nail.

From Bonifacio di Mantua to Phillipe the Eminent,

Although you are no longer in the employ of His Majesty the King of France, I believe I may have a way for you to continue to serve your country. I do not wish to share the details so abundantly as to write them in letter, but I am staying at what I have been informed was the inn you stayed in your initial journey to Paris. I will stay here for five days from the date of the letter. Should you still have any feelings of benevolence left for this city and the kingdom that rules it, despite your quarrels with the throne, I beg you to meet me.

"Phillipe the Eminent," he read. The man chuckled. Perhaps one day he would more popularly be known by that name. Until such a time, he thought, it seemed only a device for those who wished to flatter him. Still, he had nothing to do. Despite his usual policy of not going to such meetings, often held by random counts and barons who wished for some intervention in their petty local affairs by a man who they assumed was the best diplomat they could get their hands on. However, this seemed intriguing, especially since this Bonifacio appeared to know such an obscure fact as his boarding at the Great Boar Inn almost twenty years ago.

The forty year old man sighed and stood up, stretching. The letter had been sent three days ago judging by the date, so he figured it was probably time to go today, if he didn't want to risk the man leaving early.

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Barcelona, Aragon
1399

Sofia tapped the piece of parchment in front of her impatiently as she looked across at the man she was meeting with. Apparently people liked to fancy him a great master of the art of intrigue, but in Sofia's opinion, he was a thug at best. His tactics were more on the order of brute force than subtlety. A Navarran nobleman, he had been sent to Barcelona around the same time as her to stop what they thought would be an impending invasion. He had been relieved when, at this meeting, she had told him Aragon would certainly not invade his country because they were planning action against Castile. The fact that he had needed her to directly say that to him told her all she needed to know.

Still, his influence in the city was valuable. Sofia may be good at making contacts, but her network within Barcelona could not match the King of Navarra. In exchange for the information she had given him (information which was readily available to anyone who knew how to listen for rumors in the right places), he agreed to give her a list of names that could help with fabricating the evidence she would need to get Bartomeu to abandon his King. Unfortunately, in addition to being entirely incompetent, this man also had no idea how to write. She had no desire the memorize around thirty names, so she called for an inkstand from a nearby servant. They were in a back room of the estates of a wealthy merchant Sofia happened to be personally acquainted with.

Finally, the servant arrived, and she began to write down each of the names, mentally disregarding those she knew would be useless. Random noblemen, many of whom were actually in Valencia, not Barcelona, could not help her. However, her hand stopped as he mentioned one particular name. A man she would have never guessed to be anything except the height of loyalty. She hesitantly wrote it down, then attempted to exchange pleasantries with the man, but he just leered at her for some time before departing.

Sighing, she sat down to plan out her approach.
 
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Chapter 5 - Appeasement

Paris, France
1399

Phillipe opened the door to the inn, and recognized the owner. The man had aged quite a lot, but his facial features were still the same, despite his weak disposition and lack of hair. He had stayed here for almost half a year until the King finally answered his petition and gave him a chance to prove his worth. Waving his hand, Phillipe greeted the owner, who merely pointed to a table in the corner. A young man with Italian features sat, his eyes closed and head relaxing against the wall. Phillipe pulled out a chair and sat down with a heavy thump.

Bonifacio shot up, awakened by the sudden loud noise. He shook his head from side to side before finally focusing on the once-great diplomat. "Ah, you are Phillipe! What a pleasure to finally meet you!" Phillipe merely nodded. "Why so excited?" he asked, folding his hands on the table and reclining in the chair.

"Ah, you see, I am a diplomat myself. From the court of Marti d'Arago. I came here with a proposition for you." Phillipe put his hand to his beard as he listened to the man. "Your letter said this would be an opportunity to serve France, not the Catalans. Which is it?" Bonifacio nodded, and gave him a piece of parchment. "I know you've mostly ducked your head out of politics, at least that's what my sources tell me, but it's clear to many that Castile plans to finish the Reconquista with the backing of the Pope."

"So? Shouldn't that make any good Catholic happy? Finally, the infidels leave Europe. Hooray! And you still haven't answered my question."

"Castile's next target is clearly the Kingdom of Aragon. They aren't going to stop with just the Muslims. Already we have detected some attempts of the Castilians to fabricate claims on Aragon."

"Again, you have yet to answer my question. Why would I care?"

"That's where France comes in. Imagine a unified Iberia. Your country is already burdened with the war against the English and is being pressured by Burgundy. If an Iberian kingdom was to add on pressure from the south... well, you can see what happens."

"Where do I come in? How does a retired French diplomat affect the course of a war in Iberia that has the backing of the Holy Father?"

"Read the paper."

Phillipe did so, scanning his eyes along the rough treaty drafted by Bonifacio and signed by Marti I. It was an offer of alliance between France and Aragon.

"This is impossible. The French won't commit to Iberia with all those pressures you already mentioned."

"Actually, that's why we need you. Not only do you need to convince Paris, but also London. There's a second treaty prepared for the King of England."

"A threeway alliance.. ha. If I managed to pull that off, I might become the greatest diplomat in the world."

"You already are, Phillipe. That's why I'm here."

Phillipe paused. What kind of life was sitting around doing nothing, waiting for his death to come? Clenching his fist, he sat up.

"I'll do it. We go to the palace tomorrow."
 
Chapter 6 - Unification

Valencia, Aragon
2045

Sarai looked out over her class, making a wide gesture. "Now, then. Last time we talked about the Great Iberian Campaign. There was one incredible deciding factor that had nothing to do with Aragon itself. What, exactly, do you think that factor might have been?" A few of her students seemed to think about the question, and a few rose their hand to answer. She called on the quiet boy in the corner who never really bothered to say anything. "The French and English contributions due to the three-way alliance between them and Aragon," he muttered quietly, without much interest in his voice.

She nodded. "Indeed. Today, we're going to talk about that alliance and how it formed. You see, a diplomatic mission was sent by Marti I d'Arago, now known as Marti the Conqueror to a lot of you, to France and England both. At the time, the tensions from the Hundred Years' War were running high. Distracting both nations from each other could only be done by focusing them both on a secondary target. Marti saw this and invited them to destroy Castile, on the grounds of an Iberia unified by the Castilians being contrary to all their interests. At the time, the Castilians were completing the Reconquista, an endeavor supported by the Pope himself. Because of this, we're not really sure how the Catalan diplomats persuaded London and Paris, and why the two superpowers of the time accepted."

She chuckled, before adding, "Accepting our offer didn't work out well for either of them, did it?" Her class also laughed.

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Barcelona, Aragon
1399

Sofia Agosti, a woman who had faced many difficult challenges in her time as an agent of intrigue, found her current situation to be rather strange. Easy, but difficult. Simple and complex. Her goal, to turn Bartolomeu against his King, had a rather simple approach to its conclusion. Half the work had already been done earlier - create a reason for him to dislike the King. Now all she had to do was press that reason. But at the same time, it seemed rather difficult to forge anything that seemed halfway plausible. It was then that she decided she would have to go to him again in person.

That night, she again skillfully inserted herself into the palace -- the majority of the guards she passed were barely even phased. Even if they hadn't seen her ever before, she was a woman, so she it simply wasn't possible for her to be a threat, was it? "Majority" being around four, since she managed to avoid most of them on her way to the quarters of the general. Entering the palace at night would be more difficult, which she had learned on her previous trip, so she had decided to come earlier in the day and spend a few hours acting as a servant. She went to the kitchen, made some excuse about moving from her previous position, and was assigned to bring food to several people over the course of the day. By the time it was nightfall, she had actually begun to work up a bit of a sweat. Hard work, being a servant. Unfortunate that they were often the ones to be blamed for her actions, but nothing to do about that. It was a rather cruel world, after all, even for the honest and hard-working.

As people began to head to their beds, she positioned herself to make a quick entrance into Bartolomeu's room -- the guards had not been there previously, probably added as they grew ever closer to the day of invasion. Marti clearly still did not trust his general. Smirking at the results of her work, she walked inside after noticing the daytime guards going to sleep and the nighttime ones had not yet arrived.

"Hello again, my friend," she said, swaying inside the room in the most intimidating way she could manage. Bartolomeu looked up. "Oh, lovely, I was thinking you would never come back. Come to make good on what our promise, have we?"

Something was wrong. He hadn't been this cocky before. Clearly, a factor that she had not predicted had inserted itself into the situation somehow. While the thoughts in her head turned over one another, she remained perfectly externally calm. Taking a seat on a chair in the corner, she looked hard at the man in the candlelight. "You're rather interesting, you know," she said.

"Oh, really now?"

"Yes, indeed. Hard to figure out. That said, my reason for being here is simple, and that is to help you. Your king clearly mistrusts you. You honestly think he put those guards out there for.. what was it.. prevention of indiscreet actions by the servants? The closest servant quarters is several halls down. What exactly do guards here in the military quarters help with?"

"It may be to protect me from assassins, you know. I somehow have more trust in a man I have entrusted my loyalty in than to you."

"Clearly doing such a wonderful job of it. After all, if I wanted to, it would be a rather simple matter to merely make a small cut..." before he could react, she had gotten up and was standing behind him.

Bartolomeu's look suddenly changed from one of bemused disinterest to one of slight concern. "Good, then we're clear in our positions in this relationship, yes?" she said, that ever-so-slightly threatening tone creeping into her voice. He decided that clearly she wouldn't have bothered to talk to him if she really wanted to kill him. So instead, he decided to be brave.

"I have no relationship with the scum of God's earth, like you."

She smiled devilishly and move downward until she was crouching next to his chair. "Perhaps that is indeed what I am, oh Bartolomeu. Yet if you aren't interested in what I have to say, why haven't you called for the guards? Surely they're outside by now. Unless, of course, you actually are interested." She stood up. "So, shall I present to you now? Or is there more posturing to be done by the mighty general of the Catalans?"

His expression turned sour, but the man stayed silent. "Good." Sofia began to move rather deliberately back and forth across the room. "So, let us think about the things that have happened so far. You've been removed from the initial invasion, oh dear. How terrible. Perhaps he doubts your skills? But that is easily refuted by his own explanation, clearly he simply thinks you are better suited to coming along with the reinforcements. But that doesn't explain the guards. You're right, they're clearly there to protect against assassins. And then, of course, a rather incredible woman visits you twice with an unclear purpose. All of that seems like a rather interesting coincidence, I must admit."

Although he didn't believe her, his position was clearly weakened, and he still didn't bother to speak, either to her or to shout for the guards.

"Lastly, perhaps you can explain this to me?" she asked, retrieving a letter. A forgery, naturally. Since she had been the one to convince Marti that Bartolomeu was untrustworthy and had done it in person, clearly there was no actually communication. She still found it rather amusing that for once she was trying to convince someone of something that was true. Marti actually didn't trust the general.

The letter itself was made to be as realistic as possible, thus, much of it didn't matter. "Direct your attention to the bottom."

In short, I agree that the general is a man who I can no longer believe in or place any vote of confidence in. His suggestions of new martial policies are clearly meant to sabotage the campaign....
 
Chapter 7 - The Greatest Gift Arrives

Barcelona, Aragon
1399

Xenia Tovichkina was, as far as most were concerned, another poor Catalan peasant woman. Her only distinctive feature was oddly pale skin for the region she was in. However, most of that opinion, except for the word "poor", was incorrect. She was not Catalan, nor a peasant. Indeed, she came from an impressive city far to the east, one that had lost its independence only 7 years prior. At the time, Xenia had been a young girl of noble birth. Her father left Nizhni Novgorod with merely the money taken off of a merchant from a Novgorod of slightly larger fame. A trip across Europe landed them in the courts of Bavaria, Burgundy, and France. In Paris, her brother and father had been murdered. Now alone, a French courtier offered her his "protection". Knowing that the environment in Paris wasn't going to be the safest place, she declined and left for Aragon.

She had always been interested in intrigue, using her adventures in royal courts and amongst the lower nobility to listen in on gossip, plots, and schemes. Nothing had fascinated her so much in all her life. Despite her father's disapproval, she looked to begin a life of deceit. Studying under a worthless spy in France, she learned a few basic things before having to leave. She wasn't satisfied with the skills and knowledge of a mere agent, however. When she arrived in Barcelona, she worked as a barmaid and stayed in a cheap, unsavory inn. She listened to the conversations in an attempt to find something, anything, that would give her an opportunity to move up in the world.

It was in the bar that she saw another young woman walk in, exuding an air of danger and confidence, and move to sit in the back. When served them a glass of beer, she took care to eavesdrop as much as she could. There was clearly something about her... It may have been nothing, but she relieved herself from her job early and followed the woman, careful to keep her distance. She had made it about a mile before it seemed like a particularly evasive course was being taken. Eventually, the woman turned around on her and walked closer.

"Who are you, madam?" she said, with an air of grace. Her eyes told a different story though, cold and sharp with the horrors she had witnessed.

"I am.. Anya." The other woman's eyes narrowed. "No. I meant what is your real name."

"Xenia," she muttered.

"Now, I find it an odd coincidence, Xenia, that you are taking the exact course I am taking. Unless, of course, you are following me. But that would be unthinkable."

"I was merely trying to find out who you were."

"Hm. My name is Lady Alicia, dear."

Xenia looked closely, and decided to take a guess. "It would only be fair for you to tell me your real name as well."

"Why? It isn't my fault you are stupid and told me your name. But, considering you're a poor Russian who clearly doesn't really know what they are doing, I'll tell you my name. I am Sofia."

Xenia's eyes widened. A dangerous woman, Catalan, named Sofia. It couldn't be a coincidence. "You.. you're Sofia Koshka?"

"Hm? That is what the people in Vladimir called me, indeed," Sofia replied.

The young Russian girl fell to her knees. "Be my tutor! Teach me! Please.."