I don't mind it gives me some more time to work on my grande finaleActinguy said:
Your dialogue is great as always even if I can't understand a word of Arabic
My eye was caught by the following line:
:rofl:Actinguy said:
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Your dialogue is great as always even if I can't understand a word of Arabic
My eye was caught by the following line:
Late Winter, 1085 - Mediterranean Sea
Of course, as soon as the woman's toes touched the ground, she sprinted out the door. Robert cursed and chased after her, down the hall, and up the steps.
When they reached the mysterious room with the tipped over barrels pointing out of the ship, Robert siezed his chance. He grabbed one of the metal balls and threw it at the fleeing woman with all of his might, hoping to take off her leg.
The ball fell straight to the ground. Throwing metal balls was harder than he'd imagined.
The chase continued to the deck, where the woman ran to one end of the ship, then the other, and then doubled-back once again.
"Where is the ship?" she screamed in desperation, continuing to from one railing to the next.
"...You're on the ship."
"Not this ship! The other one! The one you were all talking about!"
"I never said anything about a ship, woman."
"Not to me, fool! To the others! To the rest of them!"
"The rest of who?"
"The rest of you pirates!"
"The...you mean my ship?"
"What?"
"You mean my ship. The pirates attacked my ship. It sank in the attack."
"Liar! If you are no pirate, then how did you come to be on this ship?"
"Are you a pirate?"
"Of course not."
"How did you come to be here, then?"
"You know how I came to be here, fool. I was captured."
"I climbed aboard."
"You climbed a ship."
"The anchor's chain."
"I see."
"Why did you attack me?"
"I was tied to a bed, you walked in wearing nearly nothing...where are your clothes?"
"They sank. Probably eaten by a sea dog."
"A sea dog."
"It's alright. I killed it. Sort of. My sword...fell into it's eye."
The woman raised an eyebrow.
"And the pirates? They died in the attack? All of them?"
"Yes...but I don't understand. Why did they all attack together? Why was no one left with the ship?"
"There were few of them left. They been at sea for far too long. There was no food, and then a terrible disease...by the time they captured me, not many had survived. Then they saw your ship. They were hungry, they needed the food. They did not plan well, as we can both see."
"I am glad I was able to come to your rescue then."
"I did not need your rescue. I had a plan."
"Indeed."
"You have a name, fool?"
"Woman, I am Robert of Guines, brother of Count Osbern, son of the late Count Reinel, nephew of the late Count Baldwin, grand-nephew of the late..."
"I didn't ask for your lineage."
"And you have a name too, woman?"
"It is Gulsum. Daughter of my parents. Grand daughter, oddly enough, of my grand parents."
"And you were captured?"
"Yes."
"Where from?"
"From a land you call Turkey."
"Turkey? You are a Muslim then!"
"And this makes me a heathen, yes? And yet...these pirates. These pirates who would capture me to pleasure their captain against my will, who would kill your men and burn your boat...these were Christians. These were grand, holy Christians. How proud you must be, to be associated with them purely through your religion."
"I am sorry if you were hurt. This is not the way of Christianity."
"No. It is the way of the Muslim, yes? It is the way of..."
"That is not what I meant."
"But it is! For it was my father, a Muslim, who sold me to a slave-owner, a Muslim, who lost me in a pirate attack, to Christians, who tied me to a bed. It does not matter to what you pray, all men have evil in their hearts."
"Not this man. I will see you safely back to Turkey."
"You do not listen, fool Robert. I was sold by my own father. There is nothing for me there, and even if there was, I could never return for fear of being captured once again."
"Then when we arrive in Jerusalem, my Captain and I will free you to go wherever you may wish."
"And where is this Captain?"
Robert led Gulsum to the ship's railing, along the anchor's chain, and pointed down.
But Captain Humphry was gone.
Of course, as soon as the woman's toes touched the ground, she sprinted out the door. Robert cursed and chased after her, down the hall, and up the steps.
When they reached the mysterious room with the tipped over barrels pointing out of the ship, Robert siezed his chance. He grabbed one of the metal balls and threw it at the fleeing woman with all of his might, hoping to take off her leg.
The ball fell straight to the ground. Throwing metal balls was harder than he'd imagined.
The chase continued to the deck, where the woman ran to one end of the ship, then the other, and then doubled-back once again.
"Where is the ship?" she screamed in desperation, continuing to from one railing to the next.
"...You're on the ship."
"Not this ship! The other one! The one you were all talking about!"
"I never said anything about a ship, woman."
"Not to me, fool! To the others! To the rest of them!"
"The rest of who?"
"The rest of you pirates!"
"The...you mean my ship?"
"What?"
"You mean my ship. The pirates attacked my ship. It sank in the attack."
"Liar! If you are no pirate, then how did you come to be on this ship?"
"Are you a pirate?"
"Of course not."
"How did you come to be here, then?"
"You know how I came to be here, fool. I was captured."
"I climbed aboard."
"You climbed a ship."
"The anchor's chain."
"I see."
"Why did you attack me?"
"I was tied to a bed, you walked in wearing nearly nothing...where are your clothes?"
"They sank. Probably eaten by a sea dog."
"A sea dog."
"It's alright. I killed it. Sort of. My sword...fell into it's eye."
The woman raised an eyebrow.
"And the pirates? They died in the attack? All of them?"
"Yes...but I don't understand. Why did they all attack together? Why was no one left with the ship?"
"There were few of them left. They been at sea for far too long. There was no food, and then a terrible disease...by the time they captured me, not many had survived. Then they saw your ship. They were hungry, they needed the food. They did not plan well, as we can both see."
"I am glad I was able to come to your rescue then."
"I did not need your rescue. I had a plan."
"Indeed."
"You have a name, fool?"
"Woman, I am Robert of Guines, brother of Count Osbern, son of the late Count Reinel, nephew of the late Count Baldwin, grand-nephew of the late..."
"I didn't ask for your lineage."
"And you have a name too, woman?"
"It is Gulsum. Daughter of my parents. Grand daughter, oddly enough, of my grand parents."
"And you were captured?"
"Yes."
"Where from?"
"From a land you call Turkey."
"Turkey? You are a Muslim then!"
"And this makes me a heathen, yes? And yet...these pirates. These pirates who would capture me to pleasure their captain against my will, who would kill your men and burn your boat...these were Christians. These were grand, holy Christians. How proud you must be, to be associated with them purely through your religion."
"I am sorry if you were hurt. This is not the way of Christianity."
"No. It is the way of the Muslim, yes? It is the way of..."
"That is not what I meant."
"But it is! For it was my father, a Muslim, who sold me to a slave-owner, a Muslim, who lost me in a pirate attack, to Christians, who tied me to a bed. It does not matter to what you pray, all men have evil in their hearts."
"Not this man. I will see you safely back to Turkey."
"You do not listen, fool Robert. I was sold by my own father. There is nothing for me there, and even if there was, I could never return for fear of being captured once again."
"Then when we arrive in Jerusalem, my Captain and I will free you to go wherever you may wish."
"And where is this Captain?"
Robert led Gulsum to the ship's railing, along the anchor's chain, and pointed down.
But Captain Humphry was gone.
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I should stop readin your updates as soon as you post them, everytime I check you have changed something
Hehe. Guilty as charged.
The Management Reserves The Right To Go Back And Edit Previous Posts Either To Increase Their Awesomeness Or, At Bare Minimum, To Decrease The Author's Perceived Dumbness.
For those that are not as fast on the draw as Slinky, Gulsum was originally from Jerusalem, and that was the cliff-hanger...but I wanted it to be clear that she was a Muslim, not a Jew...and once I changed that small part, the rest just came rolling.
Anyhow, I swear, one day, we will actually see what the heck Matilda and Osbern and Annelies and the rest are up to.
To say nothing of our friends in the future!
The Management Reserves The Right To Go Back And Edit Previous Posts Either To Increase Their Awesomeness Or, At Bare Minimum, To Decrease The Author's Perceived Dumbness.
For those that are not as fast on the draw as Slinky, Gulsum was originally from Jerusalem, and that was the cliff-hanger...but I wanted it to be clear that she was a Muslim, not a Jew...and once I changed that small part, the rest just came rolling.
Anyhow, I swear, one day, we will actually see what the heck Matilda and Osbern and Annelies and the rest are up to.
To say nothing of our friends in the future!
Actinguy said:
Mmm...so we have TWO fools on a boat...in the middle of nowhere, without a captain to steer it. Surely God must have some plan in all of this...perhaps, she'll kill them all?
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TheExecuter
This update featured one of the best dialogues I've seen so far on this forum. Having ben around for just over a year and a half that may not be that much, but certainly something.
Oh, very good! So, we have this girl, who speaks Arabic and will kill them all (apparently), and this boy, who is wearing mediaeval underpants and has a bit too much luck, and we don't have a captain, who is missing a leg and just plain missing.
Well, it's obvious how this all fits together with the rest of the AAR.... :rofl:
So, we have this girl, who speaks Arabic and will kill them all (apparently), and this boy, who is wearing mediaeval underpants and has a bit too much luck, and we don't have a captain, who is missing a leg and just plain missing. Well, it's obvious how this all fits together with the rest of the AAR.... :rofl:
I for one welcome our new Arabic overlord. Just in case she escapes to the future and kills US all! :wacko:
@TheExecutor: I have been trying to fit "Drip Drip Drip" back into the story, but couldn't come up with a way. I almost did it while Robert was on the first ship, before the attack, but just didn't feel right. I'll keep trying!
@Qorten: Thank you! Especially given that I wasn't too sure about the dialogue in this particular update...I felt I was speeding it along to finally wrap up the "lost at sea" storyline...it means a lot. Thanks! And the idea of someone in this timeline ending up in the future is so interesting that I'm actually giving it a thought. Haven't come up with anything yet, and I probably never will since I pretty much have the whole future storyline worked out, but nice suggestion!
@LordCowles: An excellent summary of the situation. As for how it all fits into the rest of the AAR...well...
In a very surprising way.
I will say this though: The most important character you've already met in this piece of the story is not Gulsum...it's not Robert...it's not the Captain...it's not Juvenal or any of the pirates...and it's not even the dead shark.
So.
There's that.
@Qorten: Thank you! Especially given that I wasn't too sure about the dialogue in this particular update...I felt I was speeding it along to finally wrap up the "lost at sea" storyline...it means a lot. Thanks! And the idea of someone in this timeline ending up in the future is so interesting that I'm actually giving it a thought. Haven't come up with anything yet, and I probably never will since I pretty much have the whole future storyline worked out, but nice suggestion!
@LordCowles: An excellent summary of the situation.
As for how it all fits into the rest of the AAR...well...In a very surprising way.
I will say this though: The most important character you've already met in this piece of the story is not Gulsum...it's not Robert...it's not the Captain...it's not Juvenal or any of the pirates...and it's not even the dead shark.
So.
There's that.
Late Winter, 1085 - Mediterranean Sea
"Gulsum! You see that section of planking floating next to the ship? Gather as many blankets as you can, and take them there. And timber! See if you can find any loose wood as well."
"What? Why do you..."
But Robert was already standing on the railing. He took a deep breath and jumped, diving back in to the frigid sea. He stayed under as long as he could, then came back up for air, spotting Gulsum as she made her way down the chain, with several sheets draped over her shoulder. He dove again, searching, came back up again. Water, air. Water, air. Water, air. He had seen Gulsum climb the chain and come back once more with several small pieces of wood...but what he couldn't find was the Captain.
It was no use, then. Captain Humphrey was dead. Broken, Robert slowly made his way back to the raft...when he saw what had happened.
"NO!" Robert screamed, as Captain Humphrey swung his sword at the Muslim woman.
"Gulsum! You see that section of planking floating next to the ship? Gather as many blankets as you can, and take them there. And timber! See if you can find any loose wood as well."
"What? Why do you..."
But Robert was already standing on the railing. He took a deep breath and jumped, diving back in to the frigid sea. He stayed under as long as he could, then came back up for air, spotting Gulsum as she made her way down the chain, with several sheets draped over her shoulder. He dove again, searching, came back up again. Water, air. Water, air. Water, air. He had seen Gulsum climb the chain and come back once more with several small pieces of wood...but what he couldn't find was the Captain.
It was no use, then. Captain Humphrey was dead. Broken, Robert slowly made his way back to the raft...when he saw what had happened.
"NO!" Robert screamed, as Captain Humphrey swung his sword at the Muslim woman.
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It seems Captain Humprey is still very much alive.
I was wondering... maybe the captain is a woman in disguise?
She'll kill them all!
I was wondering... maybe the captain is a woman in disguise?
She'll kill them all!
Perhaps he lost more than just his leggeek_knight said:It seems Captain Humprey is still very much alive.
I was wondering... maybe the captain is a woman in disguise?
She'll kill them all!
Small update, but nice cliffhanger
Yep, a short one...but after the next update, it will no longer be late winter, 1085!
Btw, there wasn't a place called 'Turkey' at those times. Maybe you are meaning modern day Turkemenistan?
Or just from Anatolia. Or Cilicia. Or Levant.
You fool!
Or just from Anatolia. Or Cilicia. Or Levant.
You fool!
@Enewald: Not my mistake. Gulsum's. Perhaps something was lost in the translation from Arabic to Latin.
But I wouldn't dare correct her. She'll kill me all!
But I wouldn't dare correct her. She'll kill me all!
Well, she's a stranger coming from the pirate ship -- seems logical to try to defeat her. But I do wonder where that sword came from.
Did you think the shark was dead?Snugglie said:
He has followed them and Humphrey has recollected his sword in an epic struggle involving polar bears.
Just wait until the dragon appears.Slinky said:Did you think the shark was dead?
He has followed them and Humphrey has recollected his sword in an epic struggle involving polar bears.
The Dragon!
Have you read Robert Jordans books?
Btw, how could the turk female speak latin?
Have you read Robert Jordans books?
Btw, how could the turk female speak latin?