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George is very middle child. And unfortuamntly, does indeed appear to be unremarkble, unskilled and somewhat stupid. Then again, he is 17 and looking for any kind of attention he can get.
Warwick on the other hand seems determined to irritate the King and Queen no matter how small or petty an act.
I suppose the Prince and Lady will be found in bed together by a 'shocked' audience, and thus have to marry.
Part the reason that I wanted to write this as I have done is to look at these years between the Yorkist victory and the OTL second phase. What happened during these years and why was OTL the Shakespearean version? Well, we know
that.
But what were these characters doing what they did which is not often covered and why? George is indeed a middle child and shows much of what middle children do at times as part of rich and powerful families.
I have been reflecting to my astonishment when writing recently that nearly every truly impactful thing we ever do is done for and on behalf of someone else. Almost nothing we do for ourselves is actually that significant. But what we do for others...that is perceived in a much different and higher light...perhaps because 'doing for others' is so unnatural to us.
I am a huge believer in the Jackie Robinson quote, "A life is not important other than the impact it has on other lives."
King Richard needs to meet a certain Wallachian prince to learn a trick or two about how to deal with unruly noblemen.
He's not going to drink their blood milkshake.
Warwick continues to be an issue. This alliance could be an issue. Would it be such a shame if the heir were to have an... accident? Is Warwick that subtle?
He will continue to be an issue. He wants so much.
Nooo...you were doing so well Harry...
Sigh.
This particular relationship is going to end in tears, of some sort or another.
Hahahahahaah! Don't spoil it,
@Historywhiz!
I have to admit I think of Georgie as the least likable, least bestowed with personality, of the whole brood.
I sense a growing alliance between Warwick and Georgie. And if course Warwick has gone from being one of my favorite characters to a potential powder keg and agent of chaos.
Some may see that as a good thing, because they don't like Richard. But I still have hope for him. Which means I worry about these two ..
Glad to see you and this story back
@coz1!
Rensslaer
"Least bestowed with personality" is likely my fault. I really have not had much chance to build him out as a character. He has been young, so it was easier earlier. But now that he is in his late teens, he would have to be an important figure. I hope to rectify that in the coming chapters.
Georgie is lost and vulnerable and Warwick, the sly devil, is playing on that. I see some fireworks in the future.
Welcome back, Al. Another great installment.
A perfect match.
I must disagree with young Renss, I find it in myself to like both Warwick and Richard. Both have their faults and have certainly made mistakes (and been infuriating at times) but I am mostly sad that they are at odds. Though I concede given Richard's inflexibility some kind of clash is coming, I just don't think it is entirely Warwick's fault.
On which note I do like this Warwick, something of a return to form rather than the ham fisted idiot of previous chapters. I realise that out-witting a frustrated 17 year old is not exactly the most challenging of tasks, but he handled that very well and led George by the nose to where he wanted without overtly showing his hand.
I think I also have to defend George, if he is repeatedly denied the opportunity to do anything how can he show off any skill or ability? Naming him Lord Lieutenant of Ireland was particularly stupid, obviously you aren't going to let him actually exercise that power so all you do is taunt him. I can understand not wanting to risk him in a war, but give him something to do rather than organising parties in Wales. Even if turns out he is as talentless as his detractors claim the experience of cocking something up would be good for him and he would no longer feel ignored, which is probably his biggest and most justified complaint.
The breaking down between them is due to both of their flaws. The more interesting people to write about are those that have them in spades but have no clue about it.
I took count today and noted that I have posted 22 chapters (admittedly much shorter than yours) in the last 49 days...astonishing to think of how amazing things go when you are in the zone and inspired.
It most certainly is and all I can say is, keep at it!! When you're in the groove, you go with it!!
Buckingham is just as culpable, if not more so, for what is about to happen as Fancy.
You make a very good argument as regards Buckingham, but I mostly highlight this comment because it appears you have been influenced by
@Midnite Duke and his great distaste for Margaret of Anjou (admittedly not a difficult prospect.) And yet he hates Cecily too!!
Now, this is potentially a tool to pick at for me. Currently, I'll write different versions of the 'vision' of how the scene goes...and rewrite or add as necessary where I identify beat changes.
The idea of systematically going about it could have merit...
I think beat analysis works better as an actor rather than as writer. In many ways, the practice is done to better understand the meaning of the piece. What did the author have in mind when he wrote it? It also assists in finding a more natural interaction between the actors. Yet it can be done. However, as writers I think we already do that instinctively while writing the characters. We know what we want them to do. It's just how we get them to do it...and then
they go off book! And that's when the fun starts!
To all - I am hoping to get some writing done soon, but the new puppy and work has kept me well busy. Thank you to those that caught the last scene and surely thank you to
@TheExecuter for not only reading through the work but some excellent comments along the way. I wish I could answer all of them individually, but I fear I might ruin something coming up. You are halfway there...until I start writing again.
